Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by using correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid unclear phrases like 'order 2 parks' and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: When I was young, I usually went to the cinema and celebrated my birthday with my family by having a small gathering at home.

제안: Focus on clear and correct sentence structure. Avoid mistakes like 'braid my birthday' and use linking words to explain your reasons more logically and naturally.

예시: Yes, I think it is important to celebrate my birthday because it marks my growth each year and is a special day to spend with loved ones.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and provide specific supporting details using correct vocabulary and grammar.

예시: In China, I think the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of close family members, such as parents and grandparents, because family is highly valued.

× When I was young I used to go to cinema, order 2 parks, celebrating my birthday with my family.

✓ When I was young, I used to go to the cinema, order 2 parks, and celebrate my birthday with my family.

The word 'cinema' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place. Also, 'celebrating' should be changed to 'celebrate' to maintain parallel structure with 'go' and 'order' in the sentence. The phrase 'order 2 parks' is unclear but assuming it means 'order 2 parts' or 'order 2 cakes', it should be clarified; however, since it is not a grammar problem from the list, it is left as is.

× Or by gathering.

✓ Or by gathering together.

The phrase 'by gathering' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'together' clarifies the meaning that the birthday is celebrated by gathering people together. This improves the prepositional phrase usage.

× Yes, of course it's important to braid my birthday because it's my special day and every year I grew up, so it's very important to me.

✓ Yes, of course it's important to celebrate my birthday because it's my special day and every year I grow up, so it's very important to me.

The verb 'braid' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'celebrate'. Also, 'I grew up' is past tense, but the sentence refers to a repeated action every year, so it should be present tense 'I grow up'.

× So since like my birthday.

✓ So I really like my birthday.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'I really like' completes the sentence and makes it meaningful and grammatically correct.

× I I think in China we have to spread the Dragons birthdays because they are the fishing and the there is facilities. We go to.

✓ I think in China we have to celebrate the Dragon's birthdays because they are important and there are facilities we can go to.

The phrase 'spread the Dragons birthdays' is incorrect; it should be 'celebrate the Dragon's birthdays'. 'Dragons birthdays' should be singular possessive 'Dragon's birthdays'. The phrase 'they are the fishing' is unclear and likely a mishearing or error; it is replaced with 'they are important' to make sense. 'There is facilities' should be 'there are facilities' to agree in number. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.