Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and has some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and coherent by using proper linking words and clear expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

예시: On my birthday, I usually have a small gathering with my family. We enjoy dinner together, followed by cutting a cake. After that, it's our tradition to chat and spend quality time. I really love these moments with my loved ones.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Make sure to use correct verb tenses and sentence structure. Also, provide a clear topic sentence and supporting details with linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: When I was young, my mom usually gave me clothes and shoes as birthday gifts. She also took me out for lunch or dinner to celebrate. These were special moments that I always looked forward to.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains irrelevant words. Focus on giving a clear opinion and explain why celebrating your birthday is important to you. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I think it is important to celebrate my birthday because it marks a personal milestone in my life. Celebrating helps me reflect on my achievements and spend time with family and friends.

제안: Your answer is too short and does not attempt to engage with the question. Even if you are not from China, you can try to give a general opinion or say what you have heard about birthday celebrations in China. This will show your ability to handle unfamiliar topics.

예시: Although I am not from China, I think that celebrating the birthdays of elders is very important in Chinese culture because it shows respect and appreciation for their wisdom and experience.

× Then we it's a tradition to talk and just I love together.

✓ Then we have a tradition to talk and just love being together.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing due to incorrect word order and missing verbs. The correction rearranges the sentence to a proper structure, adding the verb 'have' to express the tradition and clarifying the meaning.

× My mom usually give me clothes, shoes and Take Me Out for lunch or dinner when I was younger my birthday.

✓ My mom usually gave me clothes, shoes and took me out for lunch or dinner on my birthday when I was younger.

The verbs 'give' and 'Take' do not agree with the singular subject 'My mom' and the past tense context. They should be 'gave' and 'took' respectively to match past tense and subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, it is important because to market, but they choose to celebrate a personal milestone in my life.

✓ Yes, it is important because people choose to celebrate a personal milestone in my life.

The phrase 'because to market' is incorrect and unclear. The correction removes this phrase and clarifies the reason for importance, making the sentence coherent.