Breakfast— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and awkward phrasing, and give one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like “however” to contrast present and past.

예시: I usually have a slice of bread and a cup of coffee for breakfast. However, when I lived in the Philippines my mother used to cook rice and a boiled egg every morning, which I still fondly remember.

제안: Make your point clearly with correct grammar and specific reasons. Use one or two concise supporting reasons with linking words such as “because” or “for example.” Avoid unclear phrases like “restart your memory.”

예시: Yes, I think breakfast is very important because it gives you energy to start the day and helps your concentration. For example, if you need to take medication, having breakfast first can prevent stomach upset.

제안: Organize your answer into a clear topic sentence and one or two specific differences. Use linking words like “because” or “so” and avoid repetition and tense errors.

예시: Yes, my mornings are very different now. As a child I could sleep late and rest more, but now I often have evening shifts at work, so I get less sleep and my mornings are busier.

제안: State your preference clearly, use polite formal language (avoid “wanna”), and give one specific reason and a brief supporting detail. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I wouldn't change my morning routine at the moment because I usually wake up around 9 or 10, which gives me enough energy for the afternoon. This schedule lets me do housework and then go to work without feeling too tired.

× But way back in the Philippines, my mother always cook rice and a boiled egg every morning and I I cherish those memories up to the present.

✓ But way back in the Philippines, my mother always cooked rice and a boiled egg every morning, and I cherish those memories to the present.

The verb 'cook' must agree with the singular past habitual subject 'my mother' so use past tense 'cooked' (third-person singular past). Also remove the duplicated 'I' and replace 'up to the present' with the more natural 'to the present'. Suggestion: use 'cooked' for past habitual actions and proofread for repeated words.

× Yes, the breakfast is very vital to a healthy needs of the individual because at the end of before the end of the day you can able to restart your memory and you can gain energy if you eat something most importantly in the morning.

✓ Yes, breakfast is very important for an individual's health because before the end of the day you can restart your memory and gain energy if you eat something, especially in the morning.

The noun 'breakfast' is used in general sense and should not take the definite article 'the'. 'Very vital to a healthy needs of the individual' is ungrammatical; correct collocation is 'important for an individual's health'. 'You can able to' is redundant; use 'you can' or 'you are able to'. 'Most importantly in the morning' should be 'especially in the morning'. Suggestion: omit 'the' for general nouns, use natural collocations ('important for health'), and avoid redundant modal+able constructions.

× And it is also important if you're taking other medication that you had your breakfast for a day.

✓ And it is also important that if you are taking other medication, you have your breakfast before taking it.

The original mixes verb forms and tenses incorrectly. Use 'it is important that' + present subjunctive/indicative 'you have' to state a recommendation. 'For a day' is unnecessary; specify timing 'before taking it'. Suggestion: use clear conditional structure 'if... , you should/you have...' and correct verb form.

× Yes, there's a big difference because when I was a child, childhood years, I used to take a nap longer than I was.

✓ Yes, there's a big difference because when I was a child I used to take naps for longer than I do now.

The clause 'longer than I was' is ungrammatical. Compare past habit with present by using 'longer than I do now' or 'longer than I do'. Also 'childhood years' is redundant; keep 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: when comparing past habit to present, use present tense in the second part ('I do') or 'now' for clarity.

× Now because I'm when I'm getting getting older, I have a lot of different opportunities, most importantly at work.

✓ Now that I'm getting older, I have many more opportunities, especially at work.

The phrase 'because I'm when I'm getting getting older' is ungrammatical and contains duplication. Replace with 'Now that I'm getting older'. Use 'many more opportunities' rather than 'a lot of different opportunities' for clarity, and 'especially' instead of 'most importantly at work'. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, simplify conjunctions, and use 'now that' for changes over time.

× And that is the the big difference that working also in the evening shift also gave me a lack of sleep compared to my childhood years that I don't think about work.

✓ And that is the big difference: working the evening shift also causes me to have less sleep compared to my childhood years when I did not think about work.

Remove duplicate 'the'. 'That working also in the evening shift also gave me a lack of sleep' is awkward; use 'working the evening shift causes me to have less sleep'. Use past 'did not think' for childhood. Replace 'gave me a lack of sleep' with natural phrasing 'causes me to have less sleep'. Suggestion: use clearer cause-effect phrasing and correct tense for childhood reference.

× Up to this time I don't wanna change my morning routine because I normally get up later in the morning between 9:00 and 10:00 AM.

✓ Up to now I don't want to change my morning routine because I normally get up between 9:00 and 10:00 AM.

Use formal 'want to' rather than colloquial 'wanna' in speaking tests. 'Up to this time' is unnatural; use 'up to now' or 'so far'. Remove redundant 'later in the morning' when giving specific times. Suggestion: avoid slang in formal responses and use concise time expressions.

× Through that I had more energy in the afternoon to go to work and do some other around activities or how household chores.

✓ Because of that I have more energy in the afternoon to go to work and do other activities or household chores.

'Through that' is incorrect; use 'Because of that'. 'I had' should be present 'I have' to match current routine. 'Do some other around activities or how household chores' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'do other activities or household chores'. Suggestion: match verb tense to current habits and use correct prepositions ('because of').

× So I'm not thinking about changing my routine up to present.

✓ So I'm not thinking about changing my routine at present.

Use idiomatic phrase 'at present' instead of 'up to present'. Also keep present continuous 'I'm not thinking' which is fine; just fix the temporal expression. Suggestion: use standard expressions for current time references such as 'at present' or 'so far'.