Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (past tense), shorten redundancy, use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words like "when" or "so" correctly.

예시: I started using the internet when I was in the tenth grade because I received my first smartphone then. At that time I bought a data plan, and the first thing I did was create an email account.

제안: Correct grammar (hours, verb forms), be concise and use linking words to organize activities (for example, "mainly for...; also for..."). Add one specific example of study use to be more precise.

예시: I usually spend five to six hours online each day, mainly for studying—for example, I watch tutorial videos on YouTube about math. I also use the internet to play games, chat with friends, and upload photos on social media.

제안: Fix past tense and sentence structure, avoid filler words like "uh", and be concise. Explain briefly why restriction happened and what you did instead to give a specific detail.

예시: Yes. When I was in tenth grade and my SSC exams were approaching, my parents took away my phone so I couldn't use the internet. During that period I focused on revision and did more past-paper practice.

제안: Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. State your opinion clearly and give a concrete reason or plan to reduce time, using linking words like "because" and "so".

예시: Yes, I do. I spend around five to six hours online every day, which is too much because it affects my concentration. Therefore, I plan to limit myself to two hours by scheduling study blocks and turning off social media notifications.

제안: Make the reply more fluent and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words, and provide two specific activities you would do without the internet. Correct grammar and finish the idea about relaxation/stress.

예시: I can't fully imagine life without the internet, but if it happened I would spend more time with my family and focus on hobbies. For instance, I would read more books and practice drawing, which help me relax and reduce stress.

× I start using Internet when I was in 10th standard.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in 10th standard.

The sentence mixes present tense 'start' with past time 'when I was'. Use past tense 'started' to match the past time reference; also include the article 'the' before 'Internet' for standard usage.

× At that time I got my first smartphone.

✓ At that time I got my first smartphone.

No grammatical change required; the sentence correctly uses past tense 'got' to describe a past event. (Included for completeness—no error matching the provided list.)

× So I bought a net back and start using the Internet and the first thing I was did to make an e-mail account.

✓ So I bought a data pack and started using the Internet, and the first thing I did was create an email account.

Multiple errors: 'start' should be past 'started' to match sequence (past tense). 'net back' appears to be incorrect word choice—'data pack' is likely intended. 'the first thing I was did' is ungrammatical; correct structure is 'the first thing I did was ...' Use 'create an email account' rather than 'make an e-mail account' for natural phrasing.

× I usually spend at least 5 to 6 hour on the Internet.

✓ I usually spend at least 5 to 6 hours on the Internet.

This is a plural/singular and tense-consistency issue: 'hour' must be plural 'hours' when referring to multiple hours. 'Usually spend' is present tense and correct; only pluralization needed.

× I use it for studies who are watching YouTube videos related to my studies, playing games and chatting with my friends.

✓ I use it for my studies, watching YouTube videos related to my courses, playing games, and chatting with my friends.

The clause 'who are watching' is incorrect because it refers to a person (who) but the subject is activities. Replace with a gerund phrase 'watching YouTube videos'. Also add 'my' to 'studies' for clarity and use parallel gerund forms for all listed activities.

× I often upload photos on social media.

✓ I often upload photos to social media.

Preposition usage: use 'to' with 'upload photos to social media'. The verb phrase 'often upload' is correct present simple for habitual action.

× Yes, uh, when I was in 10th standard and my SSC exam was near.

✓ Yes, when I was in 10th standard and my SSC exam was near,

No major verb error; this clause is fine as a time clause in past tense. Comma added for sentence flow when connected to following clause.

× This time I did not or I weren't allowed to use the Internet.

✓ At that time I was not, or I wasn't, allowed to use the Internet.

'Did not' with 'allowed' is incorrect here; use 'was not allowed' or 'wasn't allowed' because 'allowed' is an adjective-like past participle and requires 'be' in past tense. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'I weren't' is incorrect; use 'I wasn't'.

× My phone was gift to my mom.

✓ My phone was given to my mom.

Incorrect verb form and phrasing: 'was gift' is wrong; use passive 'was given' to indicate the phone was transferred to the mother. 'To my mom' is correct.

× Yes, I think so.

✓ Yes, I think so.

No correction needed; present simple 'think' correctly expresses current opinion.

× I spend about 5 to 6 hours on the Internet every day and I think I should not spending more than two hours.

✓ I spend about 5 to 6 hours on the Internet every day, and I think I should not spend more than two hours.

Use base verb 'spend' after modal-like expression 'should not' (should + base verb). 'Should not spending' is incorrect gerund form; change to 'should not spend'.

× I cannot imagine a life without the Internet, but if it happened I think I would spend more time with my loved ones and my family and I would give more time to my hobbies and interests which gives me and help me to relax and stress.

✓ I cannot imagine life without the Internet, but if it happened I think I would spend more time with my loved ones and my family, and I would give more time to my hobbies and interests, which help me to relax and reduce stress.

Multiple issues: 'a life' is acceptable but 'life' is more natural; conditional 'if it happened' is okay with 'would'. 'Which gives me and help me to relax and stress' is ungrammatical—use 'which help me to relax and reduce stress.' Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'which' refers to plural 'hobbies and interests', so use plural verb 'help'. Also 'reduce stress' is the correct collocation.