Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。文を簡潔にし、正しい時制と主語・動詞の一致を意識しましょう。また、理由を明確に述べると良いです。

예시: I started using the internet when I was in high school because my parents allowed me to use a smartphone.

제안: 頻度を明確に答え、理由を簡潔に述べる際に文法と語彙の正確さを向上させましょう。冗長な表現は避け、自然な英語を心がけてください。

예시: I don't go online very often because it makes my eyes tired if I use it for a long time.

제안: 意味が不明瞭で、文法的にも誤りが多いです。質問に直接答え、過去の具体的な状況を簡潔に説明しましょう。

예시: Yes, I remember when I was younger, my parents did not allow me to use the internet because they were worried about my safety.

제안: 文が途切れており、意味が伝わりにくいです。健康への影響を述べる際は、文を完結にし、理由を明確に述べましょう。

예시: I don't spend too much time online because it can harm my health, especially my eyes.

제안: 意味が不明瞭で、語彙の選択も適切ではありません。インターネットがなければ何をするかを明確に述べ、具体的な理由や興味を説明しましょう。

예시: If I didn't have the internet, I would read books because I love reading, especially about farming and agriculture.

× I started using the Internet when I was a high school student because I started to use smartphone.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was a high school student because I started to use a smartphone.

The sentence is mostly correct in tense, but it is missing the article 'a' before 'smartphone'. This is an article error (ID 22), but since the instruction is to correct only grammar mistakes that meet the list, and article errors are included, this correction is necessary. Articles are important before singular countable nouns.

× Fan I were allowed by my parents.

✓ When I was allowed by my parents.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'Fan' is likely a typo for 'When'. 'I were' is incorrect; the correct past tense form is 'I was'. The corrected sentence is 'When I was allowed by my parents.' This fixes the past tense issue (ID 5) and subject-verb agreement (ID 27).

× Not to offer.

✓ Not too often.

The phrase 'Not to offer' is incorrect. The intended phrase is 'Not too often', which correctly uses the quantifier 'too' to indicate frequency. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers (ID 14).

× Although it's fine to go online, it's it's tired for my eyes to go for a long time.

✓ Although it's fine to go online, it's tiring for my eyes to be online for a long time.

The phrase 'it's it's tired' is incorrect; 'tired' is an adjective describing a person, but here the subject is 'it' referring to the action, so 'tiring' (present participle) is correct. Also, 'to go for a long time' is awkward; 'to be online for a long time' is better. This is an incorrect adverb placement and verb form issue (ID 20 and 10).

× Which? I want a road to use the Internet.

✓ Yes, I remember the time when I wanted to use the Internet.

The original sentence is fragmented and incorrect. 'Which?' is unclear. 'I want a road' is incorrect; likely intended 'I wanted'. The past tense 'wanted' is needed here (ID 5). The sentence is corrected for clarity and tense.

× I really wanted to use smartphone.

✓ I really wanted to use a smartphone.

Missing article 'a' before 'smartphone' (article error, ID 22). The past tense 'wanted' is correct.

× I think it's. It's not good for our health, especially my eyes so that I keep too short time on.

✓ I think it's not good for our health, especially my eyes, so I keep my time online very short.

The sentence has unnecessary periods and awkward phrasing. 'I keep too short time on' is incorrect; better is 'I keep my time online very short.' This corrects present tense usage and sentence structure (ID 6 and 26).

× Fam, I go out of the Internet.

✓ If I don't have the Internet, I would go out more.

'Fam' is unclear, likely a typo. 'I go out of the Internet' is incorrect. The sentence is about a hypothetical future situation, so modal verb 'would' is appropriate (ID 4 and 7).

× I'd like to read some books because I love reading books, especially about my fear to visit agriculture.

✓ I'd like to read some books because I love reading, especially about my desire to visit agricultural places.

'My fear to visit agriculture' is incorrect; likely intended 'my desire to visit agricultural areas'. This corrects adjective use and meaning (ID 13).