Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意时态一致性和句子结构，避免重复使用填充词“uh”。可以尝试用更流畅的句子表达时间和原因。

예시: I started using the internet officially when I was in junior high school because my mom bought me a phone. Since then, I have been able to chat with my friends on social media apps.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，建议加强句子结构练习，避免重复和不完整的句子。可以用更具体的词汇描述上网的频率和目的。

예시: I usually go online several times a day to check messages, watch videos, or find local information because the internet is an essential part of modern life.

제안: 回答中语法和表达错误较多，逻辑不清晰。建议理清句子结构，正确使用时态和主谓一致，避免语法错误。

예시: Yes, I remember when I was in senior high school preparing for my university exams. Because of the high pressure, my teachers and parents did not allow us to use smartphones at home.

제안: 回答表达不完整且有语法错误，建议练习完整句子表达观点，避免重复和不连贯。可以更清楚地说明影响和感受。

예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. Whenever I have spare time, I tend to scroll through news or social media. I know this affects my critical thinking and face-to-face communication skills negatively.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然，建议注意句子完整性和词汇准确性，避免重复填充词。可以更清晰地表达兴趣和活动。

예시: Without the internet, I would listen to music I have downloaded because I am a big fan. I would also read books to help me stay focused and relax.

× I officially started using Internet, but now I was in junior high school At that time, my mom bought me the phone so I was able to uh, uh, chat on social media apps and communicate with my friends online.

✓ I officially started using the Internet when I was in junior high school. At that time, my mom bought me a phone, so I was able to chat on social media apps and communicate with my friends online.

“Internet”前面需要加定冠词“the”，表示特指互联网；“the phone”应改为“a phone”，因为是第一次提到手机，使用不定冠词。句子中缺少连接词，需分成两句。

× I usually go online, uh, several times a day. I just usually to check a message, what video or local information because it's a necessary part of modern people's life.

✓ I usually go online several times a day. I usually just check messages, watch videos, or look for local information because it's a necessary part of modern people's lives.

“to check”前不需要“to”，应直接用动词原形“check”；“what video”应改为“watch videos”；“local information”前应加“look for”表示查找；“people's life”应为复数“people's lives”，表示人们的生活。

× Yes, definitely. Uh, when I was in Senior High School, I was a parent for my university exam because at that time every student was under high pressure. So our teacher and parents doesn't really allow us to use our smartphones at home.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was in Senior High School, I was under parental supervision for my university exam because at that time every student was under high pressure. So our teachers and parents didn't really allow us to use our smartphones at home.

“I was a parent”错误，应为“under parental supervision”表示受到家长监管；“teacher and parents”主语为复数，应使用“teachers and parents”；“doesn't”应改为“didn't”，与过去时态一致。

× So our teacher and parents doesn't really allow us to use our smartphones at home.

✓ So our teachers and parents didn't really allow us to use our smartphones at home.

句子描述过去的情况，动词应使用过去时态“didn't allow”，且主语为复数，动词需与主语一致。

× As I do think today I spend too much time online. Uh, once I have some spare time, I will just pick up my phone and scroll through some news or some social media.

✓ I do think that today I spend too much time online. Once I have some spare time, I just pick up my phone and scroll through some news or social media.

“As I do think”表达不自然，改为“I do think that”；“will just pick up”改为一般现在时“just pick up”，因为描述习惯性动作。

× I do know that it's very hard for, for my critical thinking ability and my face to face communication ability, but I can.

✓ I do know that it's very hard for my critical thinking ability and my face-to-face communication ability, but I can improve them.

“hard for”后面应直接接名词短语，去掉多余逗号；“face to face”应加连字符“face-to-face”；句子末尾不完整，补充完整表达。

× I would just, uh, listen to some music I have downloaded on my phone because I'm a big fan of music. So, uh, as I have time, I will just put my headphone on my air to explore different basic genre.

✓ I would just listen to some music I have downloaded on my phone because I'm a big fan of music. So, when I have time, I will just put my headphones on my ears to explore different basic genres.

“as I have time”应改为“when I have time”更自然；“put my headphone on my air”错误，应为“put my headphones on my ears”；“genre”应使用复数“genres”。

× Besides thought, I would also read a book because I think reading the book can let me stay focused and read uh.

✓ Besides that, I would also read a book because I think reading books can help me stay focused and improve my reading skills.

“Besides thought”错误，应为“Besides that”；“reading the book”改为泛指“reading books”；句子末尾不完整，补充完整表达。