Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần sử dụng thì đúng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "I mainly use" nên là "I mainly used". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như "uh" và hoàn thiện câu cuối cùng. Bạn nên sử dụng các từ nối để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên và logic hơn.

예시: I started using the Internet a few years ago when I got my first iPhone. Initially, I mainly used it for entertainment, but over time, my usage has changed. Now, I use the Internet for various purposes such as studying, communicating with friends, and even shopping online.

제안: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ không chính thức như "you know" trong bài thi IELTS. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "after busy day" nên là "after a busy day". Sử dụng các từ nối như "besides that" rất tốt, bạn nên tiếp tục phát huy để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I go online every day because it helps me find what I need quickly, such as shopping online. Besides that, I use the Internet to relax by watching videos or listening to music after a busy day. Overall, being online is quite enjoyable for me.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và chưa hoàn chỉnh, ví dụ như "a couple of day ago" nên là "a couple of days ago" và câu cuối cùng chưa hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên trả lời đầy đủ, rõ ràng và tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như "you know". Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, a couple of days ago, my parents banned me from using the Internet for a short time because I was spending too much time online. They wanted me to focus more on my studies and improve my productivity.

제안: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, ví dụ "It's quite time for mental well-being" không đúng, nên nói "It's not good for mental well-being". Ngoài ra, câu cuối cùng chưa hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi từ vựng "additive pupil" không phù hợp. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu hoàn chỉnh để truyền đạt ý rõ ràng.

예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. This is not good for my mental well-being and physical health because I spend many hours in front of the screen. I feel like I am becoming addicted, which is harmful.

제안: Câu trả lời có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "my love with other Internet" nên là "my life without the Internet". Bạn nên sử dụng thì đúng và câu hoàn chỉnh hơn. Hãy dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn.

예시: I can't imagine my life without the Internet because it is very useful. However, if I didn't have access to it, I would probably spend more time focusing on my studies and reading books to improve my knowledge. I would also enjoy going out with my friends more, which would strengthen our relationships.

× At first I mainly use it for entertainment purposes, but now it's quite changed that's I use it for different purposes such as uh studying, communicating with friends and even.

✓ At first I mainly used it for entertainment purposes, but now it's quite changed so that I use it for different purposes such as studying, communicating with friends, and even more.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. Since the action started in the past, 'use' should be 'used' to match the past context. Also, 'that's' is incorrect and should be 'so that' to express purpose. Additionally, 'uh' is informal and unnecessary, and a comma is needed before 'and' in a list.

× I'd say I use it every day, you know, because it's helped me find the things I need quickly like shopping online.

✓ I'd say I use it every day, you know, because it helps me find the things I need quickly, like shopping online.

The phrase 'it's helped' is past tense, but the context is about habitual action, so present tense 'it helps' is appropriate. Also, a comma is needed before 'like' to separate the example.

× Besides that, I also use the Internet to relax by watching videos or listening to music after busy day.

✓ Besides that, I also use the Internet to relax by watching videos or listening to music after a busy day.

The phrase 'after busy day' is missing the article 'a' before 'busy day'. Articles are necessary before singular countable nouns.

× Overall, being online is practically an enjoyable for me.

✓ Overall, being online is practically enjoyable for me.

The word 'enjoyable' is an adjective and should not be preceded by the article 'an' when used with 'practically'. The article 'an' is unnecessary here and should be removed.

× Yes, it's happened a couple of day ago when I spent the Internet too much so that my parent banned me for a short time to have me focus on my study and also improve my productivity.

✓ Yes, it happened a couple of days ago when I spent too much time on the Internet, so my parents banned me for a short time to help me focus on my studies and also improve my productivity.

'It's happened' is incorrect; simple past 'it happened' is correct for a specific past time. 'A couple of day' should be 'a couple of days' (plural). 'Spent the Internet' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'spent time on the Internet'. 'My parent' should be plural 'my parents'. 'To have me focus' is awkward; 'to help me focus' is better. 'My study' should be plural 'my studies'.

× And you know, I glued the.

✓ And you know, I was glued to it.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object. The correct expression is 'I was glued to it' meaning very focused or attached to something.

× It's quite time for mental well-being as well physical health because I spend a lot of time in front of the screen and I just like an additive pupil that's not good for.

✓ It's quite harmful for mental well-being as well as physical health because I spend a lot of time in front of the screen and I am just like an addictive person, which is not good for me.

'It's quite time' is incorrect; likely intended 'It's quite harmful'. 'As well physical health' should be 'as well as physical health'. 'Additive pupil' is incorrect; 'addictive person' is appropriate. The sentence is incomplete and needs clarification.

× I can't imagine my love with other Internet because it's very useful.

✓ I can't imagine my life without the Internet because it's very useful.

'My love with other Internet' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'my life without the Internet'. 'Other Internet' is not meaningful here.

× However, if I didn't have access to it, I probably spend more time focusing on my study, reading books to improve my knowledge.

✓ However, if I didn't have access to it, I would probably spend more time focusing on my studies, reading books to improve my knowledge.

In the conditional sentence, the main clause should use 'would' + base verb. 'Spend' should be 'would spend'. Also, 'my study' should be plural 'my studies'.