Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
When did you start using the internet?
수험생
I started using the Internet when I was 7 or 8 years old. Due to weather conditions, I could not visit school sometimes, so I had to open our school site and get some homework done.
시험관
How often do you go online?
수험생
To be honest, I'm chronically online even though I'm not a fan of using my phone every 5 seconds of my life and I'm trying to control myself and limit the time I spend on my social media but umm, I fail most of the time.
시험관
Can you remember a time you weren’t allowed to use the internet?
수험생
As far as I remember, it never happened to me. My parents never limited the time I spent on the Internet. However, they did restrict me from using my phone in general or a computer, so it was terrible for me.
시험관
Do you think you spend too much time online?
수험생
To my own shame, I spent scrolling Tiktok or using any other social media too much. It affects my life negatively and the reason for that is that I feel a lot of anxiety and I'm stressed out. I have a fear of missing out.
시험관
What would you do without the internet?
수험생
Ideally, I tend to think that I would be much more productive without the Internet because I would not have a reason to procrastinate scrolling Tiktok for example. Uh, but to be honest, I think I would just have another source of procrastination.
평가
총점
Part 1
When did you start using the internet?
점수: 85.0제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by making it more concise and adding a linking phrase to connect your ideas smoothly. Avoid unnecessary details that do not directly answer the question.
예시: I started using the Internet when I was about 7 or 8 years old because sometimes bad weather prevented me from going to school, so I used the school website to complete my homework.
How often do you go online?
점수: 70.0제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and be more concise. Use linking words to organize your ideas clearly. Also, avoid contradictory statements that may confuse the listener.
예시: I spend a lot of time online, especially on social media, although I try to limit it. However, I often find it difficult to control my usage.
Can you remember a time you weren’t allowed to use the internet?
점수: 80.0제안: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by linking your ideas more smoothly and clarifying the contrast between internet use and device restrictions.
예시: I don't recall ever being restricted from using the Internet itself, but my parents did limit my access to devices like phones and computers, which was frustrating for me.
Do you think you spend too much time online?
점수: 75.0제안: Try to use present tense consistently and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons for your opinion.
예시: I think I spend too much time on social media like TikTok, which negatively affects my life because it causes me anxiety and stress due to fear of missing out.
What would you do without the internet?
점수: 80.0제안: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Use linking words to contrast your ideas clearly and express your opinion effectively.
예시: Ideally, I believe I would be more productive without the Internet since I wouldn't procrastinate by scrolling TikTok; however, I might find other ways to procrastinate.
문법
× To my own shame, I spent scrolling Tiktok or using any other social media too much.
✓ To my own shame, I spend too much time scrolling TikTok or using other social media.
The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'spent' when referring to a habitual action in the present. Since the context is about current behavior, the present tense 'spend' is appropriate. Also, 'scrolling TikTok' is better expressed as 'spend time scrolling TikTok' for clarity.
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