Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your response more concise and clear by avoiding repeated words and improving sentence structure. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details using linking words.

예시: I started using the Internet during the COVID-19 pandemic because I had to work from home. Therefore, it was essential to use the Internet for meetings and office tasks.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use present tense consistently and improve clarity by linking ideas smoothly. Avoid unnecessary words and be more specific about your online habits.

예시: I usually go online during the day, especially during my breaks, to check messages from home.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and is somewhat repetitive. Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating phrases. Also, try to make your answer more concise and natural by directly answering the question with supporting details.

예시: I can't remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because I always use it for important work and official purposes.

제안: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structures. Also, explain why you spend a lot of time online with specific reasons, using linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I do all my office work and other important tasks through the Internet, so I have no choice but to use it a lot.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Provide a clear opinion and support it with specific examples using linking words.

예시: I can't imagine life without the Internet because I do almost everything online, such as shopping and booking doctor appointments. Therefore, life without the Internet would be very difficult.

× I started using the Internet during the COVID because during in though in those days I did all my office work from home.

✓ I started using the Internet during COVID because in those days I did all my office work from home.

The phrase 'during in though in' is incorrect and redundant. The correct preposition to indicate a period is 'during' or 'in', but not both together. Also, 'the COVID' is incorrect; it should be 'COVID' or 'the COVID-19 pandemic'. The sentence is clearer and grammatically correct without the extra prepositions.

× So it's it's very compulsory to use the Internet for the meetings and the other house office.

✓ So it's very necessary to use the Internet for meetings and other office work at home.

The word 'compulsory' is an adjective and is not commonly used with 'very' in this context. 'Necessary' fits better to express the idea. Also, 'the meetings' and 'the other house office' are awkward; 'meetings' and 'other office work at home' are more natural.

× I will only go online during the day.

✓ I only go online during the day.

The question asks about habitual action, so the present simple tense is appropriate. Using 'will' suggests a future action, which is incorrect here.

× Whenever I came back on my break and want to see the message from the home, I go online.

✓ Whenever I come back on my break and want to see messages from home, I go online.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the action is habitual, present simple tense should be used consistently: 'come back', 'want', and 'go'.

× I cannot remember a time when I were not allowed to use the Internet, because every time I use Internet for the official purpose or the important or for the important work, so nobody can stop me to use the Internet.

✓ I cannot remember a time when I was not allowed to use the Internet, because every time I use the Internet for official or important work, nobody can stop me from using the Internet.

The verb 'were' should be 'was' to agree with the singular subject 'I' in past tense. Also, 'use Internet' needs the article 'the'. The phrase 'stop me to use' is incorrect; it should be 'stop me from using'.

× Yes, I think I spent too much time online because I into all my work on Internet, all my office and the other important work by through Internet so I have to use it.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I do all my work on the Internet, all my office and other important work through the Internet, so I have to use it.

The sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'spent' when present tense 'spend' is appropriate for habitual action. Also, 'I into all my work' is incorrect; it should be 'I do all my work'. The preposition 'by through' is incorrect; 'through' alone is sufficient. Articles before 'Internet' are needed.

× I would not expect the life without Internet because almost all my work I do uh, through Internet like shopping, doctor appointment, uh, etcetera.

✓ I would not expect life without the Internet because I do almost all my work through the Internet, like shopping, doctor appointments, etcetera.

The phrase 'expect the life' is incorrect; it should be 'expect life'. The article 'the' is needed before 'Internet'. Also, 'doctor appointment' should be plural 'doctor appointments' to match the list format.

× So I think without Internet and the life is not possible.

✓ So I think life without the Internet is not possible.

The article 'the' before 'life' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The correct phrase is 'life without the Internet'. The sentence structure is improved by rearranging the phrase for clarity.