Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy such as repeating 'actually' and 'Internet' unnecessarily. Provide a concise and direct answer with supporting details.

예시: I started using the internet when I was seven years old. My mom used it to play music and videos, which inspired me to start using it as well.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Also, try to link your ideas logically and be more specific about your online activities.

예시: I go online every day, especially on weekdays when I have more free time. Since I don't have much work or study then, I enjoy spending time browsing the internet and relaxing.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and informal expressions. Use proper verb tenses and more formal language. Also, clarify your points with linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I remember that during my exams in November, my mom didn't allow me to use the internet so that I could focus on studying.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and lacks clarity. Use correct verb forms and avoid vague phrases like 'And yeah.' Also, try to provide a more structured and detailed response with linking words.

예시: It depends on the situation. When I have free time, especially on weekends, I tend to spend a lot of time online because I don't have any work or study obligations.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more concise. Avoid repeating phrases like 'actually' and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Without the internet, I would read novels and spend my weekends playing sports like football, volleyball, and table tennis with my family. I would also spend more time with my friends.

× Well, actually that's an quite interesting question.

✓ Well, actually that's quite an interesting question.

The article 'an' should be placed before a word starting with a vowel sound. Here, 'quite' is an adverb modifying 'interesting', so 'an' should come before 'interesting', not 'quite'. The correct phrase is 'quite an interesting question.'

× And actually I start using the Internet when I was seven years old.

✓ And actually I started using the Internet when I was seven years old.

The action happened in the past, so the verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started' to match the time frame indicated by 'when I was seven years old.'

× My mom play music, play videos and phone on Internet and from when I start the Internet.

✓ My mom plays music, plays videos, and uses the phone on the Internet, and from then I started using the Internet.

For third person singular subjects like 'my mom', verbs should have an 's' ending in the present tense ('plays'). Also, 'phone on Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'uses the phone on the Internet.' The phrase 'from when I start the Internet' is unclear and should be corrected to 'from then I started using the Internet.'

× I be online daily, but mostly I be online on weekdays because on my weekdays I got a lot of free time.

✓ I am online daily, but mostly I am online on weekdays because on my weekdays I have a lot of free time.

The verb 'be' must be conjugated correctly in the present tense. For the first person singular, it should be 'am' instead of 'be.' Also, 'got' should be 'have' to indicate possession in the present tense.

× There's no burden of study, there is no burden of any work.

✓ There's no burden of studying, there is no burden of any work.

The noun 'study' should be in gerund form 'studying' after 'burden of' to correctly express the activity causing burden.

× These are the days in which I got myself time.

✓ These are the days in which I have time for myself.

The phrase 'got myself time' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'have time for myself' to indicate personal free time.

× So I love to spend that time on the Internet and happy online lot.

✓ So I love to spend that time on the Internet and am happy online a lot.

The sentence lacks a verb before 'happy.' Adding 'am' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'online lot' should be 'online a lot' to correctly express frequency.

× To be honest, probably yeah, because when I got exam in November, my mom didn't allow me to use Internet because she was like, go and steady, focus on your studies.

✓ To be honest, probably yes, because when I had an exam in November, my mom didn't allow me to use the Internet because she said, 'Go and study, focus on your studies.'

'Got exam' is incorrect; it should be 'had an exam.' Also, 'steady' is a wrong word here; the correct verb is 'study.' The phrase 'she was like' is informal and should be replaced with 'she said.'

× So yeah, in November I was not allowed.

✓ So yeah, in November I was not allowed to use the Internet.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks the object of 'allowed.' Adding 'to use the Internet' completes the meaning.

× Actually it's really depend on this situation.

✓ Actually, it really depends on the situation.

The verb 'depend' should be in the third person singular present tense 'depends' to agree with the subject 'it.' Also, 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is,' so 'depends' is the correct form.

× When I got free time, so I spent too much time on online, like on weekends I usually spend a lot of time on online because there is no work of burden.

✓ When I have free time, I spend a lot of time online, like on weekends I usually spend a lot of time online because there is no work burden.

'Got free time' should be 'have free time' for present tense. 'Spent' should be 'spend' to match present tense. The preposition 'on online' is incorrect; 'online' is an adverb and does not need 'on.' 'Work of burden' is incorrect; 'work burden' is correct.

× Well, actually that's an quite interesting question.

✓ Well, actually that's quite an interesting question.

Same as previous similar sentence: 'an' should come before a word starting with a vowel sound, so 'an interesting' is correct, and 'quite' is an adverb modifying 'interesting.'

× Without the Internet I usually read the novels and on weekends I play game like football, volleyball, table tennis with my family and also spend time with my friends.

✓ Without the Internet, I usually read novels and on weekends I play games like football, volleyball, and table tennis with my family and also spend time with my friends.

'The novels' is incorrect; 'novels' is a plural countable noun and does not need 'the' here. 'Play game' should be 'play games' to indicate plural activities. Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list.