Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: I started using the internet when I was in primary school because my uncle gave me a smartphone as a gift. Since then, I have been able to access the internet regularly.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has some awkward phrasing and grammar mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas and improve fluency. Also, avoid redundancy and be concise.

예시: I go online almost every day because, to be honest, I can't live without the internet. I use it mainly to keep in touch with my family and friends.

제안: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain the situation with specific details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I remember in high school, the school had strict rules that did not allow us to use phones or access the internet during class time.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: Yes, sometimes I spend too much time on my phone playing games, which makes it hard for me to focus on studying.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition. Provide a clear and concise response with specific activities you would do without the internet. Use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: If I didn't have the internet, I would probably exercise more and spend time reviewing for my upcoming exams.

× I think it is on when I was going to the primary school, uh, my uncle. Sent a smartphone as a gift to me and I started to contract.

✓ I think it was when I was going to primary school, uh, my uncle sent a smartphone as a gift to me and I started to contact.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'is' instead of 'was' to refer to a past event, which is a past tense issue. Also, 'Sent' should be lowercase and connected to the previous clause. 'Contract' is likely a typo for 'contact'. The correction uses past tense verbs to match the past time frame and corrects the verb and sentence structure.

× I present almost every day and I come to be honest, I can't live without the Internet because I need to contact with my family or a friend through the Internet.

✓ I go online almost every day and, to be honest, I can't live without the Internet because I need to contact my family or friends through the Internet.

'I present' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'I go online' to express frequency. 'Contact with' is incorrect; 'contact' is a transitive verb and does not require 'with'. Also, 'a friend' should be plural 'friends' to match general meaning. The correction fixes verb usage and preposition errors.

× Yes, absolutely I can uh, in the high school, the school, the school regulates us that we can use the phone and. Absolutely use the Internet.

✓ Yes, absolutely I can. Uh, in high school, the school regulated us so that we could use the phone and absolutely use the Internet.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. Since the event is in the past, 'regulates' should be 'regulated' and 'can' should be 'could'. The sentence structure is also improved for clarity.

× Yes. Umm sometimes I literally place play. Too many phones that can't focus on the study studying.

✓ Yes. Umm, sometimes I literally play too many games on my phone and can't focus on studying.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Place play' is incorrect; likely intended 'play'. 'Too many phones' is incorrect; it should refer to 'games on my phone'. 'Study studying' is redundant. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× MMM, sometimes I will choose to resemble umm, do some exercise and review my my coming examination.

✓ MMM, sometimes I choose to relax, do some exercise, and review my upcoming examination.

'Resemble' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'relax'. 'Will choose' is less natural here; simple present 'choose' fits better for habitual actions. 'My my coming examination' has repetition and awkward phrasing; corrected to 'my upcoming examination'. The correction improves verb choice and sentence clarity.