Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use correct verb tenses and sentence structures to make your answer clearer and more natural. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about your experiences. For example, say 'I started using the internet when I was a teenager. It provided me with entertainment such as playing video games and watching movies online.'

예시: I started using the internet when I was a teenager. It offered me various forms of entertainment, like playing video games and watching movies online.

제안: Your answer is quite good but could be improved by using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and correcting minor grammar mistakes. For example, use 'and' or 'so' to link ideas and say 'it saves me time' instead of 'save me my time'.

예시: I go online several times a day, mainly to check social media and keep up with the latest news. I also find it useful to check the weather forecasts before planning my day, and I often do some online shopping because it's very convenient and saves me time.

제안: Focus on completing your sentences and using correct grammar. Also, clarify your ideas with specific reasons and use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, say 'I remember a few times when I wasn't allowed to use the internet. For instance, when I travelled abroad, I didn't connect to the local internet because it was often restricted or unreliable. Also, during school exams, using the internet was prohibited.'

예시: I remember a few times when I wasn't allowed to use the internet. For example, when I travelled to another country, I didn't connect to the local internet because it was often restricted or unreliable. Also, during school exams, using the internet was not allowed.

제안: Try to express your ideas more clearly and use correct sentence structures. Avoid repetition and be specific about how spending too much time online affects you. For example, say 'Yes, I spend too much time online. I often keep checking my social media, which reduces my concentration.'

예시: Yes, I spend too much time online. I often keep checking my social media, and this distracts me and reduces my concentration.

제안: Use correct verb forms and sentence structures. Be more specific and organised in your answer. For example, say 'Without the internet, I would read books, such as novels, cookery books, or nutrition guides. This would help me learn new knowledge and skills.'

예시: Without the internet, I would read books, like novels, cookery books, or nutrition guides. This would help me gain new knowledge and develop useful skills.

× I start using the Internet when I in when I was in teenage age.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was a teenager.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started'. Also, 'when I in when I was in teenage age' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was a teenager' to express the age correctly.

× It gave me a type of entertainment online like playing the video game or watching movie.

✓ It gave me a type of entertainment online like playing video games or watching movies.

The phrase 'playing the video game' and 'watching movie' are incorrect. We usually say 'playing video games' (plural) and 'watching movies' (plural) when speaking generally. Also, 'a type of entertainment online' is acceptable but could be more natural as 'entertainment online'.

× Also often do some online shopping because it's very convenient and save me my time.

✓ I also often do some online shopping because it's very convenient and saves me time.

The adverb 'often' should be placed after the subject 'I'. Also, 'save me my time' is incorrect; it should be 'saves me time' with the verb agreeing with the singular subject 'it'.

× Yes, I can remember a few times when I wasn't allowed use the Internet.

✓ Yes, I can remember a few times when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet.

The verb 'allowed' should be followed by 'to' plus the base verb, so 'allowed use' is incorrect; it should be 'allowed to use'.

× For example when I travel to another country I don't I didn't connect to local Internet because it's easy to restricted or unfair.

✓ For example, when I traveled to another country, I didn't connect to the local Internet because it's easy to be restricted or unfair.

The verb 'travel' should be in past tense 'traveled' to match the past context. Also, 'easy to restricted' is incorrect; it should be 'easy to be restricted' to use the passive infinitive form.

× Also during the exam at school using Internet was.

✓ Also, during exams at school, using the Internet was not allowed.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb and object. The corrected sentence completes the thought and clarifies the meaning.

× Absolutely, I spend too much time online, I use Internet.

✓ Absolutely, I spend too much time online using the Internet.

The phrase 'I use Internet' is incomplete and awkward. Combining the ideas into 'I spend too much time online using the Internet' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I stick it on and with a keep checking my social medias and views from others peoples are reducing my concentration.

✓ I keep it on and keep checking my social media, and views from other people reduce my concentration.

'Stick it on' is informal and unclear here; 'keep it on' is better. 'Social medias' should be 'social media' (uncountable). 'Others peoples' is incorrect; it should be 'other people'. Also, verb agreement corrected to 'views... reduce'.

× Without the Internet I would of reading books, reading some novel or some fashion book like a recipe or or some nutrition books.

✓ Without the Internet, I would be reading books, novels, or some fashion books like recipe books or nutrition books.

'Would of' is incorrect; the correct form is 'would be' plus the present participle. Also, 'some novel' should be plural 'novels' to match 'books' and 'some fashion book' should be plural 'books'.

× It have for learning some new knowledge from the books and get some new skills.

✓ It helps me learn new knowledge from books and gain new skills.

'It have' is incorrect; 'it' requires 'has' or a different verb. Also, 'for learning' is awkward; 'helps me learn' is better. 'Some new knowledge' is uncountable, so 'new knowledge' is sufficient. 'Get some new skills' is better as 'gain new skills'.