Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevabınızda zaman kipleri ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Ayrıca, cümleniz biraz uzun ve tekrarlayıcı. Daha doğal ve akıcı olmak için cümlelerinizi basit ve doğru zaman kipleriyle kurmalısınız. Ayrıca, daha spesifik detaylar ekleyerek cevabınızı zenginleştirebilirsiniz.

예시: I started using the internet when I was 10 years old. Initially, I used it mainly for schoolwork and homework. Later, I began using it to listen to music, watch YouTube videos, and enjoy Netflix series.

제안: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi hataları ve tutarsız ifadeler var. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizde bağlaçlar kullanarak daha akıcı ve mantıklı bir yapı oluşturmalısınız. Örneğin, 'although' veya 'but' gibi bağlaçlarla düşüncelerinizi daha iyi bağlayabilirsiniz.

예시: I go online for about eight hours a day. Although I rarely use Instagram and Twitter, I spend most of my time scrolling through TikTok, which I know is a bad habit.

제안: Cümlelerinizde zaman uyumu ve dilbilgisi hataları mevcut. Ayrıca, daha doğal ve akıcı olmak için cümlelerinizi basit ve doğru zaman kipleriyle kurmalısınız. Detayları daha açık ve spesifik ifade etmeye çalışın.

예시: I wasn't allowed to use the internet when I was a child. I only started using it when I went to middle school because my mom didn't give me permission before that.

제안: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi hataları ve anlamsal belirsizlikler var. Cümlelerinizi daha kısa ve net kurmalı, gereksiz tekrar ve dağınıklıktan kaçınmalısınız. Ayrıca, bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleler arasında mantıklı geçişler yapmalısınız.

예시: Yes, I do spend a lot of time online. I usually scroll through social media, read some books, listen to music, and watch YouTube videos and Netflix series, which I really enjoy.

제안: Cevabınız genel olarak iyi ancak daha doğal ve akıcı olması için cümle yapınızı geliştirebilirsiniz. Ayrıca, daha fazla detay ekleyerek cevabınızı zenginleştirebilirsiniz.

예시: As I mentioned before, I usually read eBooks online. If I had to live without the internet, I would probably read more physical books and spend more time outdoors.

× I start using Internet when I was 10 years old.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was 10 years old.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started'. Also, 'Internet' should have the definite article 'the' before it.

× First I was using for my school and some homework, but then I using Internet for listening music, watching YouTube videos and watching some Netflix series.

✓ First I used it for my school and some homework, but then I used the Internet for listening to music, watching YouTube videos, and watching some Netflix series.

The verb 'was using' is awkward here; simple past 'used' fits better. Also, 'I using' is incorrect; it should be 'I used'. Additionally, 'listening music' requires the preposition 'to' after 'listening'. 'Internet' needs the definite article 'the'.

× I start using Internet when I was 10 years old.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was 10 years old.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× I was using for my school and some homework

✓ I used it for my school and some homework

The phrase 'using for my school' is incomplete; it needs an object ('it') and the definite article 'the' before 'Internet'.

× but then I using Internet for listening music, watching YouTube videos and watching some Netflix series.

✓ but then I used the Internet for listening to music, watching YouTube videos, and watching some Netflix series.

'I using' is incorrect; it should be 'I used'. Also, 'listening music' requires 'to' after 'listening'. 'Internet' needs 'the'.

× I go online for like 8 hours in a day.

✓ I go online for about 8 hours a day.

The phrase 'for like 8 hours in a day' is informal and awkward; 'about 8 hours a day' is more natural.

× I'm spending my most of the time on Internet.

✓ I spend most of my time on the Internet.

The present continuous 'I'm spending' is incorrect here; simple present 'I spend' is appropriate for habitual actions. Also, 'my most of the time' should be 'most of my time'. 'Internet' needs 'the'.

× I'm spending my most of the time on Internet.

✓ I spend most of my time on the Internet.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× I'm barely using Instagram, Twitter and TikTok.

✓ I barely use Instagram, Twitter, and TikTok.

For habitual actions, simple present tense 'I barely use' is more appropriate than present continuous 'I'm barely using'.

× Most of the day I'm scrolling through Tiktok and I know it sounds bad habit but you know.

✓ Most of the day I scroll through TikTok, and I know it sounds like a bad habit, but you know.

Simple present 'I scroll' is better for habitual actions. Also, 'sounds bad habit' needs 'like a bad habit'.

× I wasn't allowed to use the Internet when I was a kid.

✓ Correct as is.

This sentence is grammatically correct.

× I start using Internet when I go to middle school.

✓ I started using the Internet when I went to middle school.

The verbs 'start' and 'go' should be in the past tense 'started' and 'went' to match the past time frame. 'Internet' needs 'the'.

× I start using Internet when I go to middle school.

✓ I started using the Internet when I went to middle school.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× Before that, my Internet permission is not allowed from my mom.

✓ Before that, my permission to use the Internet was not allowed by my mom.

The phrase 'my Internet permission is not allowed from my mom' is incorrect. It should be 'my permission to use the Internet was not allowed by my mom' to clarify meaning and correct passive structure.

× Before that, my Internet permission is not allowed from my mom.

✓ Before that, my permission to use the Internet was not allowed by my mom.

The verb tense should be past 'was not allowed' to match the past context.

× I'm spending most of the time on Internet.

✓ I spend most of my time on the Internet.

For habitual actions, simple present 'I spend' is appropriate. 'Internet' needs 'the'.

× I'm spending most of the time on Internet.

✓ I spend most of my time on the Internet.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× I'm using Internet but scrolling through social media and reading some books.

✓ I use the Internet for scrolling through social media and reading some books.

Simple present 'I use' is better for habitual actions. 'Internet' needs 'the'.

× I'm using Internet but scrolling through social media and reading some books.

✓ I use the Internet for scrolling through social media and reading some books.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× And of course I'm listening some music and watching some YouTube videos.

✓ And of course I'm listening to some music and watching some YouTube videos.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object.

× Even though I'm using for Netflix series I'm really enjoying.

✓ Even though I'm using it for Netflix series, I'm really enjoying it.

The phrase 'using for Netflix series' is incomplete; it needs an object 'it'. Also, 'I'm really enjoying' should specify what is being enjoyed.

× Well, I'm writing in bed and watching some.

✓ Well, I'm lying in bed and watching some shows.

The verb 'writing' is likely a mistake for 'lying' (resting). Also, 'watching some' is incomplete; it should specify what is being watched.

× if I have to live without Internet, I will probably read some physical books.

✓ If I had to live without the Internet, I would probably read some physical books.

The sentence is a hypothetical conditional and should use the second conditional form: 'If I had to... I would...' Also, 'Internet' needs 'the'.