Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, structure your answer clearly by stating the time you started using the internet and then adding a relevant detail. For example, you can say: "I started using the internet when I was in 11th grade. I remember it well because I bought a PC that was very heavy and big."

예시: I started using the internet when I was in 11th grade. I remember it well because I bought a PC that was very heavy and big.

제안: Improve the natural flow by using linking words and clearer sentence structures. Avoid redundancy like 'frequently' and 'all the time' together. For example, say: "I go online very often because technology is very useful nowadays. I use it for writing, reading, teaching, and learning."

예시: I go online very often because technology is very useful nowadays. I use it for writing, reading, teaching, and learning.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more concise. Avoid confusing phrasing. For example, say: "I can't remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the internet because I have always had access to it."

예시: I can't remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the internet because I have always had access to it.

제안: Complete your sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example: "Yes, I think I spend too much time online because my job involves technology. I often use my mobile phone at work, home, and school because I need it for my tasks."

예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because my job involves technology. I often use my mobile phone at work, home, and school because I need it for my tasks.

제안: Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your thoughts. For example: "It is hard to imagine life without the internet because it is essential for many things. Personally, I would struggle because my work depends on it."

예시: It is hard to imagine life without the internet because it is essential for many things. Personally, I would struggle because my work depends on it.

× I started using the Internet, umm, when I was, umm, on the 11th grade

✓ I started using the Internet, umm, when I was, umm, in the 11th grade

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'grade'. The correct preposition is 'in' when referring to school grades or years. So, it should be 'in the 11th grade'. This is a preposition usage issue (ID 11).

× I bought uh, PC.

✓ I bought a PC.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'PC'. This is an article error (ID 22).

× It was too heavy and enormously big.

✓ It was too heavy and enormously large.

The adjective 'big' is less formal and less appropriate here; 'large' fits better with 'heavy' when describing size. However, this is more stylistic than grammatical. No strict grammar error here, so no correction needed based on the list.

× Frequently I go online.

✓ I frequently go online.

Adverbs of frequency like 'frequently' are usually placed before the main verb but after the subject. So, 'I frequently go online' is correct. This is an adverb placement issue (ID 20).

× It's nowadays technology is frequently usable and I use it all the time.

✓ Nowadays, technology is frequently usable and I use it all the time.

The phrase 'It's nowadays technology' is ungrammatical. The correct structure is 'Nowadays, technology...'. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26).

× Mostly my occupation is related on technological issues.

✓ Mostly my occupation is related to technological issues.

The verb 'related' is followed by the preposition 'to', not 'on'. This is a preposition usage error (ID 11).

× I need it for my.

✓ I need it for my work.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'my'. Adding 'work' completes the sentence. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26).

× We can't do Personally, I can't do anything about Internet because my work as I have mentioned about my working style, my.

✓ We can't do without it. Personally, I can't do anything without the Internet because of my work, as I have mentioned regarding my working style.

The original sentence is fragmented and incomplete. It lacks proper connectors and objects. The correction provides a complete and coherent sentence. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26).