Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Votre réponse est un peu confuse et manque de clarté. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire, suivie de détails spécifiques. Évitez les répétitions et les hésitations pour rendre votre discours plus naturel et fluide.

예시: I started using the internet when I was five years old. My father gave me a laptop, and I wanted to play an online game, but the internet was not working. I remember feeling upset and calling my father for help.

제안: Votre réponse manque de cohérence et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour organiser vos idées et améliorez la précision de votre vocabulaire. Par exemple, expliquez clairement pourquoi vous utilisez internet et comment vous complétez cela avec des livres.

예시: I go online very often because I use the internet for studying and researching information on platforms like Google and ChatGPT. However, I also read books to deepen my understanding and improve my listening skills.

제안: Votre réponse est vague et répétitive. Essayez de donner une réponse plus précise et structurée, en évitant les hésitations. Utilisez des phrases complètes et claires pour exprimer vos souvenirs.

예시: Yes, I remember that when I was younger, my parents sometimes did not allow me to use the internet to play video games. They wanted me to focus on my studies instead.

제안: Votre réponse contient des répétitions et des erreurs. Essayez d'être plus concise et d'utiliser des mots de liaison pour clarifier vos idées. Expliquez clairement la raison pour laquelle vous pensez ne pas passer trop de temps en ligne.

예시: I don't think I spend too much time online because I mainly use the internet for learning and doing homework, rather than browsing social media like Instagram.

제안: Votre réponse est répétitive et manque de fluidité. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec des phrases claires et évitez les répétitions. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre votre discours plus cohérent.

예시: Without the internet, I would spend more time reading books about business and self-discipline. I would also go outside to run and hang out with my friends.

× I think it's the first time I started using Internet.

✓ I think it's the first time I started using the Internet.

In English, 'Internet' is a proper noun that requires the definite article 'the' before it. Omitting 'the' is incorrect in this context.

× I wanted to play in a game and I needed the Internet, of course.

✓ I wanted to play a game and I needed the Internet, of course.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary here. The correct phrase is 'play a game' without 'in'.

× And I don't know why there was not Internet.

✓ And I don't know why there was no Internet.

The phrase 'there was not Internet' is awkward. The correct form is 'there was no Internet' to indicate absence.

× I need to research in Internet like in Google Safari or ChatGPT.

✓ I need to research on the Internet using Google, Safari, or ChatGPT.

The verb 'research' is followed by the preposition 'on' when referring to the Internet. Also, 'Google' and 'Safari' are proper nouns and should be capitalized and separated by commas.

× However I always use book for knowledge and understand my listen.

✓ However, I always use books for knowledge and to improve my listening.

'Book' should be plural 'books' to indicate general use. 'Understand my listen' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to improve my listening'.

× I think so that my parents don't allow me to play video games or to to just use use the laptop and I used it, but to be honest I don't remember.

✓ I think my parents didn't allow me to play video games or just use the laptop, but to be honest, I don't remember.

The phrase 'I think so that' is incorrect; it should be 'I think'. Also, 'don't allow' should be past tense 'didn't allow' to match the past context. Repetition of 'to' and 'use' is an error.

× I used it, but to be honest I don't remember.

✓ I used it, but to be honest, I don't remember.

A comma is needed after 'to be honest' for clarity, but the tense is correct here.

× Now I don't think so because when I'm online it's always for learning something or for doing my homework.

✓ Now I don't think so because when I'm online, it's always to learn something or to do my homework.

The phrases 'for learning' and 'for doing' are less natural here; the infinitive form 'to learn' and 'to do' is preferred after 'always'.

× I spent more time learning than being in Internet and just crawling in Instagram or teaching, for example.

✓ I spend more time learning than being on the Internet and just scrolling through Instagram or TikTok, for example.

The correct preposition is 'on the Internet', not 'in Internet'. 'Crawling in Instagram' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'scrolling through Instagram'. 'Teaching' seems out of context and likely a mishearing of 'TikTok'.

× I will learn, learn reading book and go outside for running or hang out with my friends and more.

✓ I will learn by reading books and go outside for running or hang out with my friends and more.

The phrase 'learn reading book' is incorrect; it should be 'learn by reading books'. Also, 'book' should be plural 'books' to indicate general reading.