Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: I started using the internet about 20 years ago when I was at university. At that time, we had a course that taught us how to use it effectively, which helped me become familiar with the internet.

제안: Your answer is a bit repetitive and lacks clear structure. Begin with a direct answer, then use linking words to add specific reasons or examples. Also, try to avoid filler phrases and improve vocabulary for clarity.

예시: I go online almost all the time because I receive many emails and notifications from apps like Instagram, Telegram, and WhatsApp. Therefore, I need to check my phone frequently to stay updated.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is somewhat confusing. Try to answer directly, then explain with clear and specific details using appropriate linking words. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure.

예시: Yes, I remember a time when the government banned internet access due to widespread protests in our country. As a result, we were not allowed to use the internet during that period.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to give a clear, concise response with specific reasons, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid filler words and improve fluency.

예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because social media platforms like Instagram encourage me to watch many videos and advertisements, which wastes a lot of my time.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Provide a direct answer first, then add specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler phrases and improve sentence structure for better coherence.

예시: Without the internet, I think life would be very frustrating because many aspects like work, education, and communication depend on it. For example, we use the internet to stay in touch with friends and family, so losing it would cause many problems.

× I don't remember that at first time, but I recall that when I attended university we had a specific subject.

✓ I don't remember the first time, but I recall that when I attended university we had a specific subject.

The phrase 'at first time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'the first time'. This is a fixed phrase used to refer to the initial occasion something happened.

× During that time they educate us and we learn how to use the Internet.

✓ During that time they educated us and we learned how to use the Internet.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verbs should be in the past tense ('educated' and 'learned') rather than the present tense.

× If I'm not mistaken, it was 20 years ago I started to learn to use the Internet.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, it was 20 years ago that I started to learn to use the Internet.

The sentence is missing the conjunction 'that' to connect the clauses properly. Also, the past tense 'started' is correct here.

× I check my cell phones because I receive lots of emails and also I receive lots of notification on different application like Instagram, Telegram and WhatsApp and they like so I have to be online to check them.

✓ I check my cell phone because I receive lots of emails and also I receive lots of notifications on different applications like Instagram, Telegram and WhatsApp and they like so I have to be online to check them.

The singular 'cell phone' should be used instead of 'cell phones' if referring to one device. 'Notification' should be plural 'notifications' to match 'lots of'. 'Application' should be plural 'applications' because multiple apps are mentioned.

× Yes, I recall that a specific time governments government didn't allow us to use Internet and Internet would be banned for us on that time because we have lots of protests in our country and they banned the Internet to us.

✓ Yes, I recall that at a specific time the government didn't allow us to use the Internet and the Internet was banned for us at that time because we had lots of protests in our country and they banned the Internet for us.

'Governments government' is incorrect; it should be 'the government'. 'Use Internet' requires the definite article 'the Internet'. 'On that time' should be 'at that time'. Also, verb tenses should be consistent in past tense ('was banned', 'had'). 'Banned the Internet to us' should be 'banned the Internet for us'.

× Uh, to be honest with you, yes, I actually, uh, spend lots of time to go online.

✓ Uh, to be honest with you, yes, I actually spend lots of time online.

The phrase 'spend lots of time to go online' is incorrect; the correct form is 'spend lots of time online'. Also, 'spend' is present tense which is acceptable here as it refers to habitual action.

× I, I believe that I waste my time and to search the web.

✓ I believe that I waste my time searching the web.

The phrase 'waste my time and to search the web' is incorrect. The verb 'waste' is followed by a gerund ('searching') not an infinitive ('to search').

× I use social media like Instagram and they encourage me to watch lots of videos and advertisement and the like.

✓ I use social media like Instagram and it encourages me to watch lots of videos and advertisements and the like.

'They' is incorrect when referring to 'social media' as a singular collective noun; 'it' should be used. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'lots of'.

× Uh, I know it's, it doesn't.

✓ Uh, I know it doesn't.

The phrase 'it's, it doesn't' is incomplete and redundant. The correct sentence is 'I know it doesn't'.

× To answer your question, I believe that it's really frustrating for us without Internet, our job, education, our communication has lots have lots of problems without, you know, because we are relying on Internet and we keep in touch with our friends, family and like via Internet.

✓ To answer your question, I believe that it's really frustrating for us without the Internet; our jobs, education, and communication have lots of problems without it, you know, because we rely on the Internet and keep in touch with our friends, family and so on via the Internet.

'Without Internet' should be 'without the Internet' as 'Internet' is a unique entity requiring the definite article. 'Our job, education, our communication has' should be plural 'jobs, education, and communication have'. 'We are relying' should be 'we rely' for habitual action. 'Via Internet' should be 'via the Internet'.