Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答基本清晰，但有些语法错误和用词不当，例如“that convenient devices”应为“that convenient device”。建议注意单复数一致和冠词使用，同时可以更自然地表达感受。

예시: I started using the internet when I was about 11 years old. My mother bought me a great mobile phone, and I was amazed by how convenient it was. It gave me easy access to a wealth of knowledge.

제안: 回答中存在语法和表达不自然的问题，如“everyday”应为“every day”，“the Google or Baidu”应去掉冠词。建议使用更自然的表达，并注意冠词和词组搭配。

예시: I go online every day, sometimes even every hour, because my work requires me to find a lot of information. I often use Google or Baidu to search for what I need.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不够自然，如“was so indulged”应为“was so indulging myself”或“was addicted”，“China dramas”应为“Chinese dramas”，“threw out my phones”应为“threw away my phone”。建议注意时态和词汇的准确使用。

예시: Yes, I remember a time during secondary school when I was addicted to watching Chinese dramas. My mother thought it was bad for my eyes, so she threw away my phone.

제안: 回答内容完整，但表达稍显重复和啰嗦。建议使用更简洁的句子，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: Yes, I spend too much time online because of my studies and work. However, since my eyesight has worsened recently, I plan to reduce my screen time by reading novels and playing the piano instead.

제안: 回答内容丰富，但部分句子连接不够自然，且有些表达重复。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并避免重复表达。

예시: Without the internet, I would read novels and play the piano, which I really enjoy. Additionally, I like exercising and dancing to music because they bring me a lot of pleasure. Although online platforms can be distracting, I am trying to change this habit.

× I was so surprised and amazed by that convenient devices.

✓ I was so surprised and amazed by those convenient devices.

The word 'devices' is plural, so the demonstrative pronoun should be 'those' instead of 'that' which is singular.

× I often use the Google or Baidu to get my information required.

✓ I often use Google or Baidu to get the information I require.

'Google' and 'Baidu' are proper nouns and do not need 'the'. Also, 'information' is uncountable and does not need 'my' here; 'the information I require' is more natural.

× I was so indulged in watching China dramas.

✓ I was so indulged in watching Chinese dramas.

'China dramas' is incorrect; the adjective form 'Chinese' should be used to describe the dramas.

× I can remember a time I wasn't allowed to use that.

✓ I can remember a time I wasn't allowed to use it.

'That' is not appropriate here as it refers to a specific object; 'it' is the correct pronoun to refer to the internet.

× I go online everyday or even every hour because my work needs a lot of information that can be searched online.

✓ I go online every day or even every hour because my work needs a lot of information that can be searched online.

'Everyday' is an adjective meaning 'common' or 'normal'; the correct adverb phrase for frequency is 'every day'.