Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases.

예시: I started using the internet when I was a teenager. I learned from my friends, and we often chatted online together, which helped me improve my skills.

제안: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons for your online usage. Avoid repetition and unclear expressions.

예시: I go online sometimes, especially when I need to talk with my friends or family. Since I am busy at work, I usually use my phone to stay connected.

제안: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then explain the situation with specific details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and awkward phrasing.

예시: Yes, I remember during my school vacation, my family did not allow me to use the internet. They preferred that I spend more time doing outdoor activities instead.

제안: Use correct verb tenses and sentence structure. Start with a clear answer, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and awkward phrasing.

예시: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I am busy at work. Usually, I only have about one hour to use the internet when I get home.

제안: Make sure your sentences are complete and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete thoughts.

예시: If I didn't have the internet, I would prefer to do more outdoor activities, play with my son, and spend quality time with my family.

× When I was a teenage age, I started using Internet with my friends.

✓ When I was a teenager, I started using the internet with my friends.

The phrase 'teenage age' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'teenager'. Also, 'Internet' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' and is not capitalized unless at the beginning of a sentence.

× I learned to use Internet from my friend and I also chatting with her and you.

✓ I learned to use the internet from my friend and I also chatted with her and you.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'chatting' is incorrectly used here; the past tense 'chatted' fits the sentence context better.

× Sometime I I go to online for example when I need to talk with my friends or family then I use to my phone because of I am busy at my work.

✓ Sometimes I go online, for example when I need to talk with my friends or family. Then I use my phone because I am busy at work.

The adverb 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. The phrase 'go to online' is incorrect; it should be 'go online'. 'Use to my phone' is incorrect; it should be 'use my phone'. Also, 'at my work' is better as 'at work'.

× Yes, I remember a time when I didn't allow to use Internet doing to my school vacation.

✓ Yes, I remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the internet during my school vacation.

The phrase 'didn't allow to use' is incorrect; the passive form 'wasn't allowed to use' is correct. 'Doing to' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'during'. Also, 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× My family didn't allow to use Internet.

✓ My family didn't allow me to use the internet.

The sentence lacks the object pronoun 'me' after 'allow'. Also, 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× They prefer to more activities to doing outside. To doing.

✓ They prefer to do more activities outside.

The phrase 'prefer to more activities to doing outside' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'prefer to do more activities outside'. The repeated 'To doing' is unnecessary and incorrect.

× No, I didn't think I use more time to spend online because I'm a busy at my work.

✓ No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I'm busy at work.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. The question is about current habits, so present tense 'don't think' and 'spend' are appropriate. 'I'm a busy at my work' is incorrect; it should be 'I'm busy at work'.

× I just when I went to my home I just have a one hour to spend time online.

✓ When I get home, I usually have only one hour to spend online.

The phrase 'I just when I went to my home' is awkward; 'When I get home' is better. 'A one hour' is incorrect; it should be 'one hour'. Also, 'spend time online' is more natural than 'spend time online'.

× I think when I have no Internet I prefer to more more to doing a outside activities and playing with my son and spend time with my family and.

✓ I think when I don't have internet, I prefer to do more outdoor activities, play with my son, and spend time with my family.

The phrase 'prefer to more more to doing a outside activities' is incorrect. The correct form is 'prefer to do more outdoor activities'. 'Internet' should not be capitalized here. The sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring for clarity.