Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
When did you start using the internet?
수험생
I started using the Internet when I was 12 years old because it allowed me to stay in touch with my friends easily and it was quite a normal experience at that time and I was mostly engaged in entertainment activities such as watching some videos and playing games.
시험관
How often do you go online?
수험생
Actually, I frequently go online, especially in my free time. I stay in touch with my friends and tutors on we chat and I also enjoy various online activities such as watching videos or playing games because they help me relax and stay connected.
시험관
Can you remember a time you weren’t allowed to use the internet?
수험생
Yes, I remember when I was 12 years old, my parents found my eyesight was declining rapidly, so they didn't allow me to use the Internet. As a result, I spent more time in outdoor activities such as hiking, cycling and playing sports.
시험관
Do you think you spend too much time online?
수험생
Yes, I do spend too much time online. For example, I always keep in touch with my friends and tutors by social media and I also attend online classes which takes up a lot of my day. So I am actively trying to reduce my screen time.
시험관
What would you do without the internet?
수험생
Without the Internet, I would spend more time keeping in touch with my friends and tutors face to face, which is beneficial for my studies and personal growth. In addition, I would focus more on outdoor activities such as hiking, cycling, and playing sports.
평가
총점
Part 1
When did you start using the internet?
점수: 75.0제안: 回答较长且有些冗余，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，同时增加连接词使表达更流畅。
예시: I started using the Internet when I was 12 years old because it helped me stay in touch with friends. At that time, I mainly used it for entertainment, like watching videos and playing games.
How often do you go online?
점수: 80.0제안: 回答内容较丰富，但部分表达不够自然，建议注意大小写和拼写（如WeChat），并使用更多连接词使句子更连贯。
예시: I often go online, especially during my free time. I use WeChat to keep in touch with friends and tutors, and I also enjoy watching videos and playing games because they help me relax and stay connected.
Can you remember a time you weren’t allowed to use the internet?
점수: 85.0제안: 回答结构清晰，内容具体，但可以增加连接词使句子更流畅，同时丰富细节描述。
예시: Yes, when I was 12, my parents noticed my eyesight was worsening, so they didn't allow me to use the Internet. Consequently, I spent more time outdoors, engaging in activities like hiking, cycling, and playing sports.
Do you think you spend too much time online?
점수: 80.0제안: 回答内容具体，但句子结构稍显简单，建议使用更多连接词和多样词汇，使表达更自然流畅。
예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. For instance, I use social media to stay connected with friends and tutors, and attending online classes occupies much of my day. Therefore, I am actively trying to reduce my screen time.
What would you do without the internet?
점수: 85.0제안: 回答内容完整且具体，但可以通过增加连接词和丰富词汇使表达更自然。
예시: Without the Internet, I would spend more time meeting friends and tutors face to face, which would benefit my studies and personal growth. Additionally, I would focus more on outdoor activities like hiking, cycling, and playing sports.
문법
× I stay in touch with my friends and tutors on we chat and I also enjoy various online activities such as watching videos or playing games because they help me relax and stay connected.
✓ I stay in touch with my friends and tutors on WeChat and I also enjoy various online activities such as watching videos or playing games because they help me relax and stay connected.
“WeChat”是专有名词，首字母应大写。此处不属于语法错误，但应注意专有名词的正确书写。
× For example, I always keep in touch with my friends and tutors by social media and I also attend online classes which takes up a lot of my day.
✓ For example, I always keep in touch with my friends and tutors by social media and I also attend online classes which take up a lot of my day.
“classes”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“take”，保持主谓一致。
× Without the Internet, I would spend more time keeping in touch with my friends and tutors face to face, which is beneficial for my studies and personal growth.
✓ Without the Internet, I would spend more time keeping in touch with my friends and tutors face to face, which would be beneficial for my studies and personal growth.
此处“which is beneficial”应与前句虚拟语气保持一致，改为“which would be beneficial”，表示假设情况的结果。
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