Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够完整且有语法错误，表达不自然。建议回答时注意句子完整，避免语法错误，并且内容要具体且连贯。

예시: I started using the Internet when I was in middle school because I needed it to do my homework and research information for my studies.

제안: 回答较好，但有重复词汇和口语填充词，建议减少重复和口语化表达，使回答更简洁自然。

예시: I go online every day because I use my phone to check my schedule and stay in touch with my friends and family.

제안: 回答不清晰且有语法错误，表达不自然。建议明确回答问题，使用正确的时态和词汇，句子要完整。

예시: Yes, when I was a child, my parents did not allow me to use a phone or laptop, so I couldn't access the Internet at that time.

제안: 回答不完整且含糊，语法错误明显。建议完整表达观点，避免语音停顿和错误，内容要具体。

예시: I don't think I spend too much time online because I usually balance my internet use with other activities like studying and exercising.

제안: 表达情感丰富但用词不当且语法错误。建议使用更正式和准确的词汇，避免口语化和粗俗表达。

예시: Without the Internet, I would feel quite isolated because I rely on it to keep in touch with my friends and boyfriend.

× Actually I started using the Internet maybe in the middle school.

✓ Actually, I started using the Internet maybe in middle school.

这里的“the middle school”中的冠词“the”是不必要的，通常说“in middle school”表示在中学阶段。

× For that time I need to use the Internet to look at my homework and I can have a.

✓ At that time, I needed to use the Internet to look at my homework.

“For that time”应改为“At that time”表示“那时”；“need”应使用过去时“needed”，因为描述的是过去的情况；“I can have a.”句子不完整，应删除。

× Well, I I would say I go online every day.

✓ Well, I would say I go online every day.

句中重复了“I”，应删除多余的“I”。

× Every day I need to use my phone to check my daily plans and, you know, connect with my friends and my family.

✓ Every day I need to use my phone to check my daily plans and, you know, connect with my friends and family.

“my friends and my family”中第二个“my”可以省略，使表达更自然。

× Hmm, actually I think it isn't.

✓ Hmm, actually I think it isn't true.

“it isn't”后面缺少宾语，导致句子不完整，应补充“true”使句意完整。

× When was a child, my parents actually didn't bend me to use a phone or to use a laptop.

✓ When I was a child, my parents actually didn't allow me to use a phone or a laptop.

缺少主语“I”；“bend”用错，应为“allow”；“to use a phone or to use a laptop”中“to use”可省略第二次，且“a phone or a laptop”更自然。

× So I think it's not.

✓ So I think it's not true.

“it's not”后缺少宾语，句子不完整，应补充“true”。

× Actually, I think it's not, although I spent uh. What done?

✓ Actually, I think it's not, although I spent some time online.

“spent uh. What done?”不完整且语法错误，应改为完整表达“spent some time online”。

× Wow, I think I would be a little crazy.

✓ Wow, I think I would go a little crazy.

“be a little crazy”表达不自然，习惯用法是“go crazy”表示变得疯狂。

× You know, without the Internet you just lose the connection with your friends and with your boyfriend.

✓ You know, without the Internet you just lose connection with your friends and your boyfriend.

“the connection”应去掉定冠词“the”，且“with”第二次可省略，使表达更简洁自然。

× It will damn crazy.

✓ It will be damn crazy.

缺少系动词“be”，应为“It will be damn crazy.”