Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add specific details. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, start with "I started using the internet when I was in high school." Then add a supporting detail like "At that time, most of my classmates were also online."

예시: I started using the internet when I was in high school. At that time, most of my classmates were also online, so it was quite common among teenagers.

제안: Your answer is good but could be more natural and concise. Use correct verb forms and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say "I go online every day because I enjoy watching YouTube and searching for the latest news."

예시: I go online every day because I enjoy watching YouTube and searching for the latest news. It helps me stay updated and entertained.

제안: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repetition. Start with a direct answer, then add details with linking words. For example, "I don't remember ever being prohibited from using the internet because my parents were not strict. Therefore, I used it daily."

예시: I don't remember ever being prohibited from using the internet because my parents were not strict. Therefore, I used it daily without any restrictions.

제안: Clarify your ideas and avoid confusing phrases. Use linking words to explain reasons and examples. For instance, "Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I love watching videos. For example, I often watch a channel called Mochi Maru, which shows the daily life of a cat."

예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I love watching videos. For example, I often watch a channel called Mochi Maru, which shows the daily life of a cat named Mochi.

제안: Make your answer more structured and grammatically correct. Use linking words to list activities. For example, "Honestly, I can't imagine life without the internet. However, I suppose I would sleep more, read books, and watch Netflix."

예시: Honestly, I can't imagine life without the internet. However, I suppose I would sleep more, read books, and watch Netflix to pass the time.

× I think since when I was a high school student, of course I was a teenager, so everyone, every classmates were using.

✓ I think since I was a high school student, of course I was a teenager, so everyone, every classmate was using.

The phrase 'every classmates' is incorrect because 'every' should be followed by a singular noun. 'Classmate' should be singular here. Also, 'were' should be 'was' to agree with the singular subject 'every classmate'.

× Of course, every day I enjoy go online, for example watching YouTube and searching for the the latest news.

✓ Of course, every day I enjoy going online, for example watching YouTube and searching for the latest news.

After the verb 'enjoy', the verb should be in the '-ing' form, so 'go' should be 'going'. Also, there was a repeated 'the' which was corrected.

× I don't think I had the prohibition to for using the Internet when I even when I was a student.

✓ I don't think I had the prohibition from using the Internet even when I was a student.

The phrase 'prohibition to for using' is incorrect. The correct preposition after 'prohibition' is 'from' followed by the gerund form 'using'. Also, the phrase 'when I even when I was a student' was simplified to 'even when I was a student' for clarity.

× My parents were are not strict persons, so I was I think I was using every day.

✓ My parents were not strict persons, so I think I was using it every day.

The phrase 'were are' is incorrect; only one verb is needed. Also, 'I was I think I was' is redundant and corrected to 'I think I was'. Added 'it' to clarify the object (the Internet).

× I think so because I love you too.

✓ I think so because I love it too.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect here; the speaker likely means 'it' referring to the internet or online content.

× This is the daily life of the cat, which called Mochi Summer and Hannah Jam.

✓ This is the daily life of the cat, which is called Mochi Maru and Hannah Jam.

The verb 'called' needs the auxiliary 'is' to form the passive voice 'is called'. Also, corrected 'Mochi Summer' to 'Mochi Maru' to match the original name.

× To be honest, I cannot imagine now without the Internet, but I can say maybe sleeping a lot and read the book, watch Netflix, something like that.

✓ To be honest, I cannot imagine life now without the Internet, but I can say maybe sleeping a lot, reading books, watching Netflix, something like that.

The sentence lacked a subject after 'imagine'; added 'life' for clarity. Also, parallel verb forms are needed after 'maybe': 'sleeping', 'reading', 'watching' all in '-ing' form for consistency.