Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. For example, explain why your parents were strict and how you used the internet for studying.

예시: I started using the internet when I was 12 because my parents were strict about my screen time. However, I mainly used it for studying and preparing for exams rather than for social media.

제안: Avoid repeating ideas and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about how social media can improve skills.

예시: I go online most of the time because social media is an important part of everyone's life nowadays. Moreover, if used properly, it can help improve communication and learning skills.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by using correct grammar and linking words. Provide specific details about what you did instead of using vague phrases like 'I don't know'.

예시: Yes, I remember a time before I was 12 when I wasn't allowed to use the internet. Instead, I spent time doing physical exercises and outdoor activities, which I actually enjoyed.

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Be more specific about the important things you do online and how they help you.

예시: Yes, I think I spend a lot of time online nowadays. However, I use social media mainly to gain new information and improve my skills in various areas.

제안: Make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding filler words and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

예시: Without the internet, I would read books, watch movies, spend time with my friends, and solve puzzles like Sudoku to improve my problem-solving skills.

× I started using Internet when I was like 12 because I had strict parents and the using of Internet because of using it for studying and my exams and improving my skills in studying not for Instagram or social media.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was about 12 because I had strict parents and used the Internet for studying, my exams, and improving my skills, not for Instagram or social media.

The word 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' because it is a specific noun. Also, the phrase 'the using of Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'used the Internet' to correctly express the action. Using 'like' to mean 'about' is informal; 'about' is more appropriate here.

× Most of the time because social media nowadays, it's the part of everyone's life and I think it's a big part of everyone's life and it's really improve your skills and everything if you use it in the right way.

✓ Most of the time because social media nowadays is a part of everyone's life, and I think it's a big part of everyone's life, and it really improves your skills and everything if you use it in the right way.

The verb 'improve' should be in the third person singular present tense 'improves' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'it's the part' should be 'it's a part' because social media is one part among many.

× Yeah, I completely remember it. It was like back then when I weren't 12 years old, and it was actually very fun for me because I had to do a physical educational and physical maintenance. I don't know.

✓ Yeah, I completely remember it. It was back when I wasn't 12 years old, and it was actually very fun for me because I had to do physical education and physical maintenance. I don't know.

The phrase 'I weren't' is incorrect; the correct past tense negative form for 'I' is 'I wasn't'. Also, 'a physical educational' is incorrect; the correct term is 'physical education'.

× If you mean now, I can say yes because umm social media is the big part of my life and it's not because of wasting time with it. I use it for important things and getting new information and improving myself and different ways.

✓ If you mean now, I can say yes because social media is a big part of my life, and it's not because I waste time with it. I use it for important things, getting new information, improving myself, and in different ways.

The phrase 'is the big part' should be 'is a big part' because it is one among many parts. Also, 'it's not because of wasting time with it' is awkward; it should be 'it's not because I waste time with it' to correctly express the subject and verb. The list at the end needs commas and the preposition 'in' before 'different ways' for clarity.

× Well without the Internet I will do like reading books or watching movies and going out with my friends and doing puzzles like the number puzzles because like sudoku it makes me improve my solving skills.

✓ Well, without the Internet, I would read books, watch movies, go out with my friends, and do puzzles like number puzzles because, like Sudoku, it helps me improve my problem-solving skills.

The sentence talks about a hypothetical situation, so 'would' is more appropriate than 'will'. Also, 'do like reading books' is informal and incorrect; it should be 'read books'. The phrase 'it makes me improve my solving skills' is better expressed as 'it helps me improve my problem-solving skills' for clarity and correctness.