Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Please focus on using correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. For example, avoid unclear phrases like 'I can template' and 'don't ascension'. Also, try to keep your answer concise and directly related to the question. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I started using the Internet when I was about six years old. At that time, my teacher helped me learn basic computer programs designed for beginners. Since then, I have mainly used the Internet to explore educational content and improve my computer skills.

제안: Try to form complete sentences and avoid fragmented phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, use more precise vocabulary and avoid repetition, such as 'free resource' twice.

예시: I go online every day using my iPad to explore various content. I believe the Internet is a great way to learn nowadays because it offers many free resources.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Please try to express your ideas clearly and directly. Use simple sentences and correct verb forms. Also, explain the situation more specifically.

예시: Yes, I remember a time when I was not allowed to use the Internet because I tried to watch an illegal movie. My parents stopped me from connecting to the Internet for a while.

제안: Try to avoid sentence fragments and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific and clear when giving examples.

예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I like to compare prices of products on many platforms. For example, I often check prices for skincare products and motorcycles, which I find very interesting.

제안: Please use complete sentences and correct verb tenses. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid unclear phrases like 'it could wait to play'.

예시: Without the Internet, I would spend more time playing with my siblings and friends. Sometimes, I play football with my big brother or play games with my younger sister. I think playing is a good way to relax.

× I can template that I start using the Internet when I was about 6 years old.

✓ I think that I started using the Internet when I was about 6 years old.

The modal verb 'can' is incorrectly used here to express certainty or memory. The correct modal verb is 'think' or 'believe' to express recollection. Also, 'start' should be in past tense 'started' to match the past time reference.

× my teacher help me study different programs designed for beginners.

✓ my teacher helped me study different programs designed for beginners.

The verb 'help' should be in past tense 'helped' to agree with the past time frame and subject.

× I mainly use the Internet to explore education, don't ascension and improve my computer skills.

✓ I mainly use the Internet to explore education, learn, and improve my computer skills.

The phrase 'don't ascension' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the intended meaning is 'learn'. Also, the verb 'use' is correct in present tense as it refers to habitual action.

× Every day. In my daily life. I use my iPad to explore many content.

✓ Every day, in my daily life, I use my iPad to explore much content.

The original sentences are fragmented. They should be combined into one sentence for clarity. Also, 'many content' is incorrect; 'content' is uncountable, so 'much content' is correct.

× In the Internet, in discovery.

✓ On the Internet, for discovery.

The correct preposition with 'Internet' is 'on'. 'In discovery' is unclear; 'for discovery' or 'to discover' is more appropriate.

× So I think it's a good way to learn in nowadays.

✓ So I think it's a good way to learn nowadays.

The phrase 'in nowadays' is incorrect; 'nowadays' is an adverb and does not need a preposition.

× So it's a free resource. You can learn with free resource, yeah.

✓ So it's a free resource. You can learn with free resources, yeah.

'Resource' should be plural 'resources' to match the context of multiple learning materials.

× I think they wanted to watch an illegal movie.

✓ I think they wanted to watch an illegal movie.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× I think it's free, but I was then by the Internet so that is the first time that I have to.

✓ I thought it was free, but I was then banned from the Internet, so that was the first time I couldn't connect to the Internet.

The original sentence is unclear and fragmented. 'I was then by the Internet' is incorrect; likely intended 'banned from the Internet'. Also, tense consistency and sentence structure are improved.

× I can to connect with Internet.

✓ I couldn't connect to the Internet.

'I can to connect' is incorrect. The correct past negative form is 'I couldn't connect'. Also, 'the Internet' requires the definite article.

× Yes, just because.

✓ Yes, just because I have to.

The sentence is incomplete and needs an explanation or continuation to be grammatically correct.

× I have to explore the price of products in many many. Platform,

✓ I have to explore the prices of products on many platforms,

'Many many' is redundant and incorrect. 'Prices' should be plural to match 'products'. 'Platform' should be plural 'platforms' and the preposition 'on' is correct for platforms.

× so I love to compare the price of goods.

✓ so I love to compare the prices of goods.

'Price' should be plural 'prices' to match 'goods'.

× For example is skin care and the motorcycle that very cool.

✓ For example, skincare products and motorcycles that are very cool.

'Skin care' should be 'skincare products' as a noun phrase. 'The motorcycle' should be plural 'motorcycles' to match general reference. Also, 'that very cool' needs verb 'are'.

× I've been. Play with my siblings, play with my friends.

✓ I used to play with my siblings and play with my friends.

'I've been' is incomplete and incorrect here. The past habitual action is better expressed with 'I used to play'.

× Sometimes I play football with my Big Brother, sometime I played.

✓ Sometimes I play football with my big brother; sometimes I played

'Big Brother' should be lowercase unless a name. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. The sentence is incomplete and needs continuation.

× A. Goals with my younger sister, so I think it could wait to play and it's a good way to relax.

✓ a game with my younger sister, so I think it could be fun to play and it's a good way to relax.

'A. Goals' is unclear; likely 'a game'. 'Could wait to play' is incorrect; 'could be fun to play' is appropriate. Sentence structure improved for clarity.