Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が短く、文法的に不自然な部分があります。例えば「I started using it in order to. Study English.」は文として完結していません。より自然で効果的な答えにするために、文をつなげて一文で表現し、具体的な理由を明確に述べましょう。

예시: I started using the Internet about six years ago when I was 14 because I wanted to study English more effectively.

제안: 「I mainly use the Internet to use various subjects」という表現は不自然です。より適切な動詞を使い、文の流れをスムーズにしましょう。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより論理的になります。

예시: I go online about three times a day, mainly to study subjects like English and mathematics because it helps me find useful resources and improve my skills efficiently.

제안: 回答は明確で具体的ですが、接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより自然になります。また、理由をもう少し詳しく説明すると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I remember when I was 10 years old, about 10 years ago, my father was very strict and didn't allow me to use the Internet because he was worried it might distract me from studying and affect my grades.

제안: 最初の文「If I do, I spend about three.」は意味が不明瞭で文法的にも誤りがあります。回答は明確で簡潔にし、論理的に話を展開しましょう。

예시: I usually spend about three hours online each day. Although I use the Internet for both work and entertainment, sometimes I feel I spend too much time online and should reduce it to focus on other important activities.

제안: 「doing outdoors activities like High Kick」や「helps me with my little girls」という表現が不自然で意味が伝わりにくいです。具体的な活動内容を明確にし、文法的に正しい表現を使いましょう。

예시: Without the Internet, I would spend more time doing outdoor activities like hiking. I enjoy being in nature because it helps me relax and appreciate beautiful landscapes.

× I started using it in order to. Study English.

✓ I started using it in order to study English.

The sentence is fragmented due to an unnecessary period after 'to'. The phrase 'in order to' should be followed directly by the verb 'study' without a period to form a complete sentence.

× I mainly use the Internet to use various subjects such as English and mathematics.

✓ I mainly use the Internet to study various subjects such as English and mathematics.

The preposition 'to use' is incorrect in this context. The correct verb is 'study' to express the purpose of using the Internet for learning subjects.

× If I do, I spend about three.

✓ If I do, I spend about three hours.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'three'. Adding 'hours' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence.

× Without the Internet, I would spend more time doing outdoors activities like High Kick.

✓ Without the Internet, I would spend more time doing outdoor activities like High Kick.

The adjective 'outdoors' is incorrectly used; the correct form is 'outdoor' when describing activities.

× I enjoy being in nature because it helps me with my little girls and appreciate beautiful landscapes.

✓ I enjoy being in nature because it helps me relax and appreciate beautiful landscapes.

The phrase 'helps me with my little girls' is unclear and likely incorrect. It seems the intended meaning is that nature helps the speaker relax. Also, the verb 'appreciate' should be connected properly to the subject 'I'.