Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý tưởng không được truyền đạt một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh những câu dài dòng và lỗi phát âm. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu cú mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I started using the internet when I was very young because I grew up in a city where internet access was common. Since then, I have been using it regularly for learning and entertainment.

제안: Bạn trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ chưa chính xác. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I go online every day. For instance, I usually check the internet right after I wake up. Sometimes, I watch videos while doing other tasks. Overall, I spend most of my day online except when I am sleeping.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp còn yếu, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ phù hợp hơn để mô tả trải nghiệm của mình.

예시: Yes, when I was a child, my parents were very strict and did not allow me to use the internet or phone. Therefore, I spent most of my time playing outside and enjoying time with my family.

제안: Bạn trả lời có nội dung rõ ràng nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ không chính xác, làm câu trả lời thiếu tự nhiên. Hãy chú ý sử dụng thì đúng, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I definitely spend too much time online, especially during summer vacation when I am free. I usually spend the whole day on my phone, and my parents often tell me to go outside and play instead.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ phù hợp để nối các ý.

예시: I can't imagine life without the internet. However, if that happened, I think I would spend more time studying, especially learning iOS development. Also, I would use the extra time to go outside and play more.

× Oh, is it a interesting question, but I think I started using the Internet once the world kiss because, you know, I was born an grow up in, uh, the in the. Martin errors so when it was born the internets had already appear and so that I have a chain to a set to the Internet in the early age.

✓ Oh, is it an interesting question, but I think I started using the Internet once the world kissed because, you know, I was born and grew up in, uh, the Martin area so when it was born the internet had already appeared and so I had a chance to access the Internet at an early age.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound as in 'interesting'. 'Grow up' should be past tense 'grew up'. 'Internets' should be singular 'internet'. 'Appear' should be past tense 'appeared'. 'Have a chain to a set to' is incorrect; it should be 'had a chance to access'. 'Early age' needs the article 'an' before it. These corrections fix adjective use, verb tense, and article errors.

× I go on line on a daily basis. For example, when I wake up, I used on. I used the Internet immediately. I even watching the video while editing. So I can say that I use the Internet all of my day except the sleeping time.

✓ I go online on a daily basis. For example, when I wake up, I use the Internet immediately. I even watch videos while editing. So I can say that I use the Internet all day except during sleeping time.

'Used on' is incorrect; it should be 'use the Internet'. 'Watching' should be 'watch' to match the present tense. 'All of my day' is better as 'all day'. 'Except the sleeping time' should be 'except during sleeping time'. These corrections address verb form and preposition use.

× I say when I was a kid, my parents will were really strictly so they don't allow me to use the phone. So I just only spent all my time playing go out and spending my time with my family.

✓ I would say when I was a kid, my parents were really strict so they didn't allow me to use the phone. So I only spent all my time playing, going out, and spending time with my family.

'Will were' is incorrect; 'would say' fits better for past habitual action. 'Strictly' should be adjective 'strict'. 'Don't allow' should be past tense 'didn't allow'. 'Just only' is redundant; 'only' suffices. 'Playing go out' is incorrect; it should be 'playing, going out'. These fix modal verb, adjective, and verb tense errors.

× Yes, definitely, especially in summer vacation because you know in that time I will really free. So I usually spend all day on the phone. So my parents always tell me to go play out to go out instead up using instead of spending all day on phone.

✓ Yes, definitely, especially during summer vacation because, you know, at that time I am really free. So I usually spend all day on the phone. My parents always tell me to go out and play instead of spending all day on the phone.

'I will really free' is incorrect; 'I am really free' fits present state. 'Go play out to go out' is redundant and incorrect; 'go out and play' is correct. 'Instead up using' is incorrect; 'instead of spending' is correct. These corrections address modal verb use and preposition errors.

× Oh my God, I can image that day. But I think without the Internet I would spend more time to study, especially learning iOS and uh, I would use, I will use the time to go out to play more.

✓ Oh my God, I can imagine that day. But I think without the Internet I would spend more time studying, especially learning iOS, and I would use the time to go out and play more.

'Can image' should be 'can imagine'. 'Spend more time to study' should be 'spend more time studying'. 'I would use, I will use' is redundant; 'I would use' is correct for conditional. 'Go out to play more' is better as 'go out and play more'. These fix modal verb and verb form errors.