Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Προσπαθήστε να απαντάτε άμεσα στην ερώτηση με μια σαφή πρόταση θέματος και να αποφεύγετε περιττές λεπτομέρειες ή ασάφειες. Χρησιμοποιήστε σωστή γραμματική και πιο φυσική ροή λόγου.

예시: I started using the internet when I was in the last year of primary school after I got my first phone. Since then, I have used it mainly for communication and information.

제안: Χρησιμοποιήστε πιο οργανωμένες προτάσεις και αποφύγετε επαναλήψεις. Προσθέστε συνδετικές λέξεις για να κάνετε την απάντηση πιο συνεκτική και ολοκληρωμένη.

예시: I go online every day because I use the internet to surf, get news, and communicate with my friends. Sometimes, I also use it for studying or entertainment.

제안: Απαντήστε άμεσα στην ερώτηση και προσθέστε συγκεκριμένες λεπτομέρειες ή παραδείγματα για να ενισχύσετε την απάντησή σας. Αποφύγετε ασάφειες και λάθη στη σύνταξη.

예시: I can't recall a time when I wasn't allowed to use the internet because I usually manage my usage well and my family trusts me to use it responsibly.

제안: Χρησιμοποιήστε πιο σαφείς και σωστές προτάσεις, με σωστή χρήση συνδέσμων για να εκφράσετε την άποψή σας με σαφήνεια και συνοχή.

예시: I don't think I spend too much time online because I set limits for myself. This way, I can also spend quality time with my family.

제안: Προσπαθήστε να δώσετε μια πιο συγκεκριμένη και ολοκληρωμένη απάντηση, με σαφή δομή και χωρίς ασάφειες. Χρησιμοποιήστε παραδείγματα ή προβλέψεις για να εμπλουτίσετε την απάντηση.

예시: Without the internet, I think I would spend more time reading books or meeting friends in person. It would be challenging, but I would find other ways to stay informed and entertained.

× I think that the when I was in primary school, I in the end of the primary school, I get my first phone after an appointment of doctor, of course.

✓ I think that when I was in primary school, at the end of primary school, I got my first phone after a doctor's appointment, of course.

The verb 'get' should be in the past tense 'got' to match the past time frame indicated by 'when I was in primary school' and 'at the end of primary school'. Also, 'an appointment of doctor' is corrected to 'a doctor's appointment' for natural phrasing.

× And I think that time I start using the phone when I was going to call it.

✓ And I think at that time I started using the phone when I was going to call it.

The verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started' to agree with the past time reference 'at that time'.

× I go online every day, go because I surf on the Internet, I get informed by my phone, I talked with my friends and we called each other so we can hang out later or something like that.

✓ I go online every day because I surf the Internet, get information on my phone, talk with my friends, and we call each other so we can hang out later or something like that.

The verbs should be in the present tense to match the habitual action 'every day'. 'Talked' and 'called' are past tense and should be 'talk' and 'call'. Also, 'get informed by my phone' is better expressed as 'get information on my phone'.

× And sometimes I use my phone also for my.

✓ And sometimes I also use my phone for myself.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'for myself' completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.

× I can't say that I have an addiction in my phone and I can't live without it.

✓ I can't say that I have an addiction to my phone and I can't live without it.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'addiction to' something.

× I don't think that it was a time that I wasn't allowed to use.

✓ I don't think there was a time when I wasn't allowed to use it.

The phrase 'a time that I wasn't allowed to use' is awkward; 'a time when I wasn't allowed to use it' is correct. Also, 'there was' is needed to express existence in past tense.

× As it seems to me no becauses I can't say that I spent really too much time in my phone because I have limit and I can control my the time that I spent in my phone, so I can lose the time that I am with my family also.

✓ As it seems to me, no, because I can't say that I spend too much time on my phone since I have limits and can control the time I spend on my phone, so I don't lose the time I am with my family.

The verbs should be in present tense to match the current situation. 'Spent' is past tense and should be 'spend'. 'In my phone' should be 'on my phone'. 'I have limit' should be 'I have limits'. 'Lose the time' should be 'don't lose the time'.

× Am I don't know, I have never thought about it before and I don't know if it will be a time that I will not use the Internet because we live in the period that.

✓ I don't know, I have never thought about it before and I don't know if there will be a time when I will not use the Internet because we live in a period where

Corrected 'Am I don't know' to 'I don't know'. 'It will be a time' changed to 'there will be a time' for correct expression. 'We live in the period that' changed to 'we live in a period where' for natural phrasing.