Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and awkward phrasing.

예시: Yes, I enjoy science, especially biology. For example, I find studying the human body and animal behavior fascinating because it helps me understand how living things function and interact with nature.

제안: Give a direct time reference and use clearer grammar. Use a topic sentence stating when you started, then one supporting detail about school schedule or purpose with a linking word.

예시: I started learning science when I began primary school in Thailand. For instance, we had about two to three science lessons per week to build a foundation for later university entrance exams.

제안: State your preference clearly then explain why with a specific reason. Avoid filler sounds and unclear phrases; use linking words for coherence.

예시: Biology is my favorite science subject because I find studying organism development fascinating. Moreover, I feel more relaxed studying biology than subjects that require heavy mathematical calculations.

제안: Answer directly with a clear example of an activity or project. Use proper tense and concise sentences; include one specific outcome or insight to make it concrete.

예시: I have done microbiology lab work where I observed how bacteria grow under a microscope. As a result, I learned about cell structure and how environmental conditions affect growth.

제안: Use correct tense and name or describe the show briefly. Make one clear point about why you like such programs and give a specific example of what surprised you.

예시: Yes, I enjoy science TV programs. For example, as a child I watched a show about simple lab experiments that explained everyday science, and I was often surprised by the unexpected results of the demonstrations.

제안: If you are unsure about another country, say so briefly then answer about your own experience. Use coherent linking words and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'science museums') and give a clear reason.

예시: I'm not sure about China, but in Thailand many children visit science museums. Parents often take them to see interactive exhibits so they can learn about science in a fun, educational way.

× I do like science when it comes to the biology subject.

✓ I do like science when it comes to the subject of biology.

The original sentence has awkward word order; 'biology subject' is not the natural English collocation. Reordering to 'the subject of biology' improves clarity and maintains subject-verb agreement. Use definite article 'the' with 'subject' to specify which subject is meant.

× The physics that have to calculate the number is.

✓ Physics, which involves calculating numbers, is difficult for me.

The original sentence misuses plural 'have' with 'physics' and has incomplete structure. 'Physics' as a noun is singular; use 'is' and a relative clause 'which involves' to describe it. Rearranged to convey meaning clearly.

× I thought it was very hard for me.

✓ I thought it was very hard for me.

Sentence is grammatically correct for past opinion. No change needed; keep as past tense because student refers to earlier feelings. (Included for completeness: no correction required.)

× I like when it can learn about the human body, animals and the nature.

✓ I like learning about the human body, animals, and nature.

Use gerund 'learning' after 'like' rather than 'when it can learn'. Remove 'the' before 'nature' because 'nature' is a general noun here. This corrects verb form and article usage.

× In Thailand, students had to learn subjects such as science UMM since they get into the school.

✓ In Thailand, students have to learn subjects such as science as soon as they enter school.

Mixed tenses: 'had to' and 'since they get into' conflict. Use present simple 'have to' for general obligation and 'enter' for habitual action. Replace 'since they get into the school' with 'as soon as they enter school' for natural phrasing and correct preposition use.

× There are several to three classes per week and we'll learn lots of them for entering the university.

✓ There are about three classes per week, and we study a lot of material to prepare for entering university.

'Several to three' is incorrect quantifier usage. Use 'about three' or 'three' for clarity. 'We'll learn lots of them' is vague; 'study a lot of material' is clearer. Remove 'the' before 'university' when speaking generally.

× I'm fond of biology subject.

✓ I'm fond of the subject of biology.

'Biology subject' is not idiomatic; use 'the subject of biology' or 'biology' alone. Add 'the' to specify 'subject'.

× I found that when learning organisms develop AA, it's fascinating and feel relaxed more than subject other subject.

✓ I find learning about how organisms develop fascinating, and it relaxes me more than other subjects do.

Original has tense and structure errors and unclear 'AA'. Use present tense 'find' for general preference, change clause order to 'learning about how organisms develop', and correct verb agreement: 'it relaxes me' and 'other subjects do' for comparison.

× My lessons about, uh, microbiology, which is learn how Organism develop and the, and its structure, umm, they learn insights of them, how it works, how it's growing.

✓ My microbiology lessons are about how organisms develop and their structure; they teach insights into how organisms work and grow.

Use noun phrase 'microbiology lessons' and 'are about' plus gerund 'how organisms develop'. Use plural 'organisms' and possessive 'their structure'. 'They teach insights into' is natural; 'how it's growing' should be 'how they grow' for agreement.

× I'm enjoying watching science TV programs, especially when I was a child there wasn't TV show called Sponge Clever which is about the lab experiment in our daily life.

✓ I enjoy watching science TV programs. When I was a child there was a TV show called Sponge Clever that was about laboratory experiments in everyday life.

Mixed tenses and tense consistency: use present simple 'I enjoy' for general habit. For past reference, use past 'there was' and 'that was'. Replace 'the lab experiment in our daily life' with 'laboratory experiments in everyday life' for natural phrasing.

× The outcome was surprisingly sometimes.

✓ The outcomes were sometimes surprising.

Adverb placement: 'surprisingly sometimes' is awkward. Use 'sometimes surprising' or 'were sometimes surprising'. Also adjust number to 'outcomes' to match plural context or keep singular if referring to one outcome.

× I don't know about the Chinese people, but however in Thailand Thai people usually visit sign museum when they were kids.

✓ I don't know about Chinese people, but in Thailand Thai people usually visit science museums when they are kids.

Remove redundant connectors 'but however'. 'Sign museum' likely intended 'science museum'. Use present habitual tense 'usually visit' with 'are kids' or past 'when they were kids' consistently. Chosen present for habitual action.

× Their parents bring them to see the sun, to make umm, to teach them, make them more education.

✓ Their parents take them to science museums to teach them and to give them more education.

'Bring them to see the sun' is incorrect and unclear; likely meant 'take them to (science museums)'. Use infinitive purpose 'to teach them' and 'to give them more education' or 'to educate them'. Use 'educate' as a verb rather than 'more education'. 'Bring' vs 'take' depends on speaker perspective; 'take' is more natural here.