Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接で分かりやすいですが、文法ミスや冗長表現があり、発言の一貫性に欠けます。まず現在と過去の好みを明確に区別し、接続詞で理由を論理的に繋いでください（例：“because”や“so”）。また不要な繰り返しを避け、文は3〜4文にまとめて自然に述べる練習をしてください。具体的には時制の一致（liked→liked/used to、do not like→don’t like）や不要な挿入句の削減を意識しましょう。

예시: I used to enjoy science in elementary and junior high school, but I don’t like it much now because I find the subjects difficult to understand. Also, I rarely use scientific knowledge in my job, so I don’t have many opportunities to study it further.

제안: 答えは基本的に正しいですが、言い回しが回りくどく、文法と語順の誤りがあります。不要な詳細（“after graduation government schools...”）は簡潔にし、時系列を明確にした短い文で答えてください。接続詞（for example, then, later）を使って流れを整え、語彙は“curriculum”や“study”を正しく使いましょう。

예시: I started learning science in elementary school, where the curriculum included subjects like physics, chemistry and mathematics. Later, I continued studying science in both junior high and high school.

제안: 良いポイントは理由と経験を述べている点です。しかし時制の不一致（cannot→couldn't/was unable）、冗長な“uh”や繰り返しが多く、文が途切れています。理由を明確にし、経験を時系列で述べると良いです。文は短く、語彙は“logical”、“understand”、“enjoyed solving problems”のように正しく使いましょう。

예시: I find mathematics the most interesting because it is very logical. At first I didn’t understand the reasoning, but after three or four years of study I gradually grasped the underlying logic and began to enjoy solving mathematical problems.

제안: 内容は具体例を含んでいて良いですが、文法ミスや語順の乱れが目立ちます（“I heard tried to experiment”など）。実験の手順や結果を簡潔に説明し、因果関係を示す接続語（for example, then, which showed）を使って論理的に整理してください。専門用語は必要最小限にし、観察した結果や感想をはっきり述べましょう。

예시: I enjoyed doing simple experiments in high school. For example, we rolled balls down a slope to observe motion and collisions, which demonstrated basic physics principles like gravity and momentum. It was a very interesting and memorable experience.

제안: 意図は伝わりますが、語法の誤り（“I can hardly motivation”）や不自然な表現（“I do not think I like what such TV programs”）があります。好きな理由と条件（内容が易しい/難しい）を明確に分けて述べ、接続詞で対比を示してください。また形容詞の使い方に注意して“useful/entertaining”など適切な語を選びましょう。

예시: Yes, I enjoy watching science programs because they stimulate my curiosity and motivate me to learn. However, I dislike shows that are too technical or hard to follow; I prefer programs that explain concepts in a clear and entertaining way.

제안: 意見を述べる構成は良いですが、文法と語順の誤り（“that's depends on the ages”，“they. Loved”）があり、表現が散文的です。年齢差を示す対比を明確にし、具体例を一つの流れる文で述べてください。語彙は“depend on age”、“often visit”、“rarely visit”など自然な表現を使いましょう。

예시: I think it depends on age: children often visit science museums, but many adults rarely go, even if they enjoyed science as kids. For example, most of my adult friends rarely visit museums nowadays.

× Yes, basically I liked scientific subjects in my elementary school and the junior high school, but there's things changed gradually.

✓ Yes, basically I liked scientific subjects in elementary school and junior high school, but things changed gradually.

The verb phrase 'there's things changed' mixes present contraction 'there's' with past action and is ungrammatical. Remove 'there's' and use simple past 'things changed' to match the time frame. Also drop articles 'my' before school levels when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past habits and simplify school references.

× I now do not like scientific subjects because it is too difficult to understand and.

✓ I now do not like scientific subjects because they are too difficult to understand.

Subject 'scientific subjects' is plural, so the pronoun and verb should be plural ('they are'). The sentence ended with an incomplete conjunction 'and.' Remove the trailing 'and' and use correct plural agreement. Suggestion: Match plural subject with 'they are' and avoid hanging conjunctions.

× I do not use knowledge about science from my work.

✓ I do not use knowledge about science in my work.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect; use 'in' to indicate application of knowledge within work. The rest of the sentence is present simple and appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'in my work' to express using knowledge at work.

× I remember that I started learning sciences from elementary school.

✓ I remember that I started learning science in elementary school.

Use singular 'science' as the uncountable field, and 'in elementary school' is the standard prepositional phrase. 'From' suggests continuous start point but 'in' is natural here. Suggestion: Use 'in' for school periods and 'science' as an uncountable noun.

× In elementary schools they have a curriculum about science like mathematics and physics and chemistry, and after graduation government schools in junior high school and the high school also they have.

✓ In elementary school they have a curriculum about science like mathematics, physics, and chemistry, and after graduation government schools in junior high and high school also have it.

Several issues: use singular 'elementary school' when speaking generally, list punctuation improved with commas, order of clauses fixed, and pronoun placement corrected ('also have it' rather than 'also they have'). 'The high school' should be 'high school' in general statements. Suggestion: Keep consistent school level terms and place verbs close to subjects.

× I studied science subjects for long time.

✓ I studied science subjects for a long time.

Missing article 'a' before 'long time.' In past tense this phrase should be 'for a long time.' Suggestion: Use 'for a long time' to indicate duration.

× For me mathematics is interesting because mathematics is very logical subject.

✓ For me, mathematics is interesting because mathematics is a very logical subject.

Missing article 'a' before 'very logical subject.' Also add a comma after introductory phrase for clarity. Suggestion: Use articles with singular countable nouns: 'a very logical subject.'

× For example when we started learning mathematics, uh I cannot understand the reason and logic of the mathematics but.

✓ For example, when we started learning mathematics, at first I could not understand the reasons and logic of mathematics.

Tense inconsistency: 'started' is past so follow with past 'could not' rather than 'cannot.' 'Reason' should be plural 'reasons' and remove redundant article before 'mathematics.' Remove trailing conjunction 'but.' Suggestion: Keep past-tense consistency and use plural when generalizing reasons.

× After learning for three or four years, I gradually understand to understood the logic of the mathematics and uh, I enjoyed solving the problems of.

✓ After learning for three or four years, I gradually understood the logic of mathematics, and I enjoyed solving the problems.

Mixed tenses and wrong verb forms: use past 'understood' to match 'after learning' and 'enjoyed' is correct past. Remove infinitive 'to' and extra 'the' before 'mathematics.' Complete 'solving the problems' without trailing 'of.' Suggestion: Maintain past tense and clean up unnecessary articles and prepositions.

× I heard tried to experiment some physical phenomena in my high school.

✓ I tried to experiment with some physical phenomena in high school.

'I heard tried' combines two verbs incorrectly; likely student meant 'I tried.' Use 'experiment with' rather than 'experiment some.' Drop 'my' when speaking generally about high school. Suggestion: Use 'experiment with' and avoid stacking verbs.

× For example, we put some balls on the slope and we observed. Moves over the balls, it reflects the physics or what happened is very important.

✓ For example, we put some balls on a slope and observed how they moved; this reflects physics and what happened was very interesting.

Pronoun and clause errors: 'we observed. Moves over the balls' is ungrammatical. Use 'observed how they moved' to describe motion. 'It reflects the physics' is better as 'this reflects physics.' Use past 'was' to match narrative. Suggestion: Combine clauses and use clear subject pronouns ('they') for the balls.

× It was very interesting experience for me.

✓ It was a very interesting experience for me.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'very interesting experience.' Suggestion: Use 'a' with singular countable nouns.

× Yes, I basically like watching science TV programs because it stimulates my curiosity and I can hardly motivation to learn science.

✓ Yes, I basically like watching science TV programs because they stimulate my curiosity and motivate me to learn science.

'It stimulates' should be 'they stimulate' to match plural 'programs.' 'I can hardly motivation' is incorrect structure; use 'motivate me' or 'give me motivation.' Suggestion: Match plural subjects and use verb 'motivate' with object 'me.'

× However, if the content is too difficult to understand, I do not think I like what such TV programs.

✓ However, if the content is too difficult to understand, I do not think I would like such TV programs.

Awkward word order and modal use: 'I do not think I like what such TV programs' is incorrect. Use conditional 'would like' to express preference under hypothetical condition and place 'such TV programs' at end. Suggestion: Use conditional phrasing 'would like' for hypothetical preferences.

× I would say that it is suitable for watching. Uh, the quality is very normal.

✓ I would say that they are suitable to watch. Uh, the quality is fairly average.

'It is suitable for watching' awkward for plural programs; use 'they are suitable to watch.' 'Very normal' is not natural; use 'fairly average' or 'quite ordinary.' Suggestion: Use natural collocations: 'suitable to watch' and 'average quality.'

× Well, I think that that's depends on the ages, because children will go to Science Museum very often.

✓ Well, I think that it depends on age, because children go to science museums very often.

'That's depends' incorrect; use 'that depends.' 'Ages' and 'Science Museum' use inappropriate plurality/capitalization: say 'age' generally and 'science museums' when plural. 'Will go' is unnecessary future; use 'go' for habitual action. Suggestion: Use 'depends on age' and present simple for habitual actions.

× However, adults don't go to the museum even if they. Loved science subjects in their child time.

✓ However, adults don't go to museums even if they loved science subjects in their childhood.

Sentence fragments: 'even if they. Loved' must be combined. 'Child time' is unnatural; use 'childhood.' Use plural 'museums' if speaking generally. Suggestion: Combine clauses and use 'childhood'.

× My friends are adult people, but I heard that they rarely go to the museum.

✓ My friends are adults, but I heard that they rarely go to museums.

Use 'adults' as the noun form rather than 'adult people.' Use plural 'museums' for general statements. Suggestion: Prefer 'adults' and pluralize 'museums' when generalizing.