Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct tense and article use, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed studying science at school. For example, in secondary school we learned about Earth's evolution and planetary magnetic fields, which I found fascinating because they explain how planets form and protect atmospheres.

제안: Give a direct answer, then one clear, specific example and a brief reason. Avoid vague statements about sharing knowledge unless briefly explained. Reduce repetition and fix grammar.

예시: Yes, I use scientific knowledge daily. For instance, I rely on GPS and compass navigation, which depend on satellite technology and Earth's magnetic field, so understanding these helps me navigate reliably.

제안: Answer directly naming the subject, give a specific reason and one clear supporting detail. Avoid hesitations and awkward phrasing; use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I would like to learn more about astrobiology and planetary science because they study how life could exist on other planets; for example, researching Mars' environment helps us assess whether humans could live there in the future.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your view, then one or two specific reasons using examples. Improve grammar and coherence, and avoid informal words like 'got'.

예시: Yes, I think everyone should study basic science because it helps people understand natural events such as floods and climate change, which in turn enables them to take safer and more informed decisions.

제안: Answer the question directly (yes/no), then give one specific example of a program or source and explain briefly why. Avoid starting with 'And' and focus the response to two sentences max.

예시: Yes, I enjoy science programs and I follow NASA’s Facebook page to learn about space exploration and astrobiology, because these sources keep me updated and allow me to share accurate information with others.

× Yes, I love science and so when I was in my secondary school because we've learned the basic knowledge of how our planet evolves as well as the magnetic fields that surrounded in our our planets.

✓ Yes, I loved science in secondary school because we learned the basic knowledge of how our planet has evolved as well as the magnetic fields that surround our planet.

Tense and verb form errors: the sentence mixes past and present perfect awkwardly. Use 'loved' to match 'was in my secondary school' (past), use simple past 'we learned' for completed learning, or present perfect 'has evolved' to describe planetary evolution up to now. 'Surrounded in our our planets' is incorrect wording and redundancy; use 'surround our planet'. Also remove duplicated 'our'. Suggestion: Keep tenses consistent: if talking about past schooling, use past simple for actions finished in the past, and use present or present perfect for general facts about the planet.

× It's very interesting facts that you will understand those.

✓ These are very interesting facts that you can understand.

Incorrect use of verb form and determiners: 'It's' (it is) with plural 'facts' is wrong; use 'These are'. 'You will understand those' is awkward; 'you can understand' is more natural. Also avoid dangling demonstrative 'those' without a clear noun. Suggestion: Match singular/plural and use appropriate modal or ability verb.

× Yes, I use science knowledge most of the time.

✓ Yes, I use scientific knowledge most of the time.

Word choice/article: 'science knowledge' is non-idiomatic; use 'scientific knowledge'. No article is needed here. Suggestion: Use adjective 'scientific' to modify 'knowledge' or say 'knowledge of science'.

× For example, I'm using the GPS or compass while driving and it is related to satellites.

✓ For example, I use GPS or a compass while driving, and these are related to satellites.

Tense and article issues: 'I'm using' (present continuous) suggests a temporary action; 'I use' is better for habitual actions. 'the GPS or compass' needs an article before 'compass' and 'GPS' typically used without 'the'. Also 'it is related' should agree in number with plural subject; use 'these are related'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and ensure subject-verb number agreement.

× Due to that we understand the the basic knowledge of science.

✓ Because of that, we understand the basic principles of science.

Awkward connector and repeated 'the'. Use 'Because of that' or 'As a result' instead of 'Due to that' (which is followed by a noun). 'Basic knowledge of science' is acceptable but 'basic principles of science' is more natural. Remove duplicate 'the'. Suggestion: Use correct connective and avoid repeating words.

× Most importantly, you can share it to the future generation if you you know the knowledge about those.

✓ Most importantly, you can share it with future generations if you know about them.

Preposition and pronoun errors: 'share it to' should be 'share it with'. 'the future generation' is better as 'future generations'. 'you you know the knowledge about those' has duplication and awkward phrasing; use 'if you know about them' or 'if you have that knowledge'. Suggestion: Use 'share with' and pluralize 'generations' when speaking generally.

× Yes, there is a science subject that I would like to to know.

✓ Yes, there is a science subject I would like to learn about.

Verb choice and article: 'would like to to know' is incorrect and duplicated 'to'. Use 'learn about' or 'study' rather than 'know'. The article 'a' before 'science subject' is acceptable but the sentence is improved by removing unnecessary words. Suggestion: Use 'learn about' for subjects.

× For example, discovers of new planet and the science of life.

✓ For example, the discovery of new planets and the science of life.

Noun form and article errors: 'discovers' is the verb form; use noun 'discovery'. 'new planet' should be plural 'new planets' when speaking generally. Add 'the' before 'discovery' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct noun forms and pluralize when generalizing.

× It's a very interesting fact because, uh, you will learn about possibilities of the future generation that they can able to to live and explore the other planet because of the science of life.

✓ It's very interesting because you learn about the possibilities for future generations to live on and explore other planets because of the science of life.

Multiple errors: 'It's a very interesting fact' is wordy; 'It's very interesting' suffices. 'you will learn' can be present 'you learn' when describing general outcomes. 'possibilities of the future generation' should be 'possibilities for future generations'. 'that they can able to to live' incorrectly combines 'can' and 'able to' and duplicates 'to'; use 'to live' or 'to be able to live'. 'the other planet' should be 'other planets' when general. Suggestion: Simplify phrasing, avoid redundant modals, and pluralize appropriately.

× Yeah, it is very vital to everyone to know the to study science because the they had the basic knowledge to know what's happening around us.

✓ Yes, it is very important for everyone to study science because they have the basic knowledge to understand what's happening around us.

Word choice and article errors: 'vital to everyone to know the to study' is garbled; use 'important for everyone to study'. Remove extra 'the' and correct tense 'had' to 'have' since it's a general statement. 'to know what's happening' is better as 'to understand what's happening'. Suggestion: Keep sentence concise, use present simple for general truths, and remove extra words.

× For example, it got floods and calamities, most importantly the global warming.

✓ For example, there are floods and calamities; most importantly, global warming.

Tense and structure: 'it got floods' is incorrect. Use 'there are floods and calamities' for general occurrences. 'the global warming' should be 'global warming' without 'the'. Suggestion: Use 'there are' for existence and avoid unnecessary articles with uncountable nouns.

× It is also related to science, so they have the proper knowledge about it.

✓ It is also related to science, so people should have the proper knowledge about it.

Pronoun reference: 'they' is vague; better use 'people' or 'we' and add modal 'should' if recommending. Suggestion: Clarify who 'they' refers to and use appropriate modal to indicate obligation or recommendation.

× And following the NASA's Facebook page, because I would like to know about space exploration and the science of life.

✓ I follow NASA's Facebook page because I would like to know about space exploration and the science of life.

Sentence fragment and article error: Starting with 'And following' creates a fragment. Change to full sentence 'I follow'. Also 'the NASA's' is incorrect; use 'NASA's'. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments and ensure subject-verb present; remove unnecessary conjunction at start.

× And also in the future, you can share your knowledge to the next generation because of what you've learned about science.

✓ Also, in the future you can share your knowledge with the next generation because of what you've learned about science.

Preposition and style: 'share your knowledge to' should be 'share your knowledge with'. Remove leading 'And' and keep 'the next generation' if speaking about a specific future cohort. Suggestion: Use 'share with' and keep sentences direct.