T-shirt— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating frequency, then give a brief reason and one specific detail. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'I work', 'on weekdays'). Avoid redundant phrases and keep to under five sentences.

예시: I usually wear T-shirts at the weekend. During weekdays I work for a non-governmental organization, so I wear formal clothes, but on weekends I prefer T-shirts because they are comfortable. I often choose ones with designs of musicians I like.

제안: Answer directly about frequency, then give a clear reason and one specific example. Use correct tense and simpler vocabulary (e.g., 'I buy', 'designs', 'fans'). Remove filler words and unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, I usually buy a new T-shirt every month after I get my salary. I collect T-shirts with musician designs because I am a big fan, so each purchase reminds me of a concert or a favorite band.

제안: Give a clear opinion, then support it with a specific reason and an example or comparison. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'however') and correct collocations ('more casual', 'comfortable'). Keep sentences simple and organized.

예시: T-shirts are generally considered casual and comfortable for older people in my country. Because they are easy to wear and wash, many older people choose T-shirts for daily activities. For example, retired neighbours often wear T-shirts when they go shopping or exercise in the park.

제안: Respond with a clear past-tense statement, then give 1–2 specific reasons or examples. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., 'my parents preferred', 'they bought T-shirts'). Keep it concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, I wore T-shirts as a child. My parents preferred to buy T-shirts because they were more comfortable and cheaper than formal clothes. For example, I often wore colourful band or cartoon T-shirts to school and playtime.

× The two I'm a worker in the non governmental organizations.

✓ I work for two non-governmental organizations.

The original sentence lacks proper subject-verb structure and word order. 'The two I'm a worker in the non governmental organizations' mixes a determiner 'the two' incorrectly with the occupation. Use subject + verb + object: 'I work for two non-governmental organizations.' Also hyphenate 'non-governmental' and use 'for' to indicate employment.

× In a weekdays I usually wear the formal dress and then for the weekend I usually wear the T-shirt that I really like and it designs of the musicians that I really like on my T-shirts.

✓ On weekdays I usually wear formal clothes, and at the weekend I usually wear T-shirts with designs of musicians I really like.

Wrong article and preposition: use 'on weekdays' (not 'in a weekdays') and 'at the weekend' (or 'on weekends'). 'The formal dress' is unnatural; use plural 'formal clothes'. Remove redundant 'it' and restructure to 'T-shirts with designs of musicians I really like.' Also pluralize 'T-shirts'.

× I'm buying AT shirts every month after get a salary because I like to collect the descents of the T-shirt from the musicians that I'm become a big fans of it.

✓ I buy T-shirts every month after I get my salary because I like to collect T-shirts with designs from musicians I have become a big fan of.

Incorrect tense and modal/continuous usage: 'I'm buying' implies temporary action; habitual actions use simple present 'I buy.' Missing subject in 'after get a salary' requires 'after I get my salary.' 'Descents' is wrong word; use 'designs.' 'I'm become a big fans of it' is ungrammatical; use 'I have become a big fan of' (singular 'fan') and remove redundant 'it.'

× So it's like, uh, useful situations of me.

✓ So it's useful for me.

Awkward phrase 'useful situations of me' is ungrammatical. Use 'useful for me' to express that something benefits the speaker. Keep sentence concise.

× I think that T-shirt is one of the clothes that more casual rather than the formal one that actually for the older people, T-shirt is one of the clothes that's so comfortable to wear because every day in daily life, not from all, we can wear it freely.

✓ I think that T-shirts are more casual than formal clothes. For older people, T-shirts are comfortable to wear in daily life because we can wear them freely.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('T-shirt is' -> 'T-shirts are') and comparative structure ('more casual than formal clothes'). 'One of the clothes' is awkward; pluralize and generalize. Remove confusing phrases like 'not from all.' Ensure pronoun agreement: 'them' for plural 'T-shirts.'

× Uh, when I was a child, rather than collect the formal clothes, one, uh, my parents uh, had a preferences to collect the T-shirt for me because I think it's more comfortable for kids like me and I think it's cheaper rather than the other.

✓ When I was a child, instead of buying formal clothes, my parents preferred to buy T-shirts for me because I thought they were more comfortable for children and cheaper than other clothes.

Use correct past tense 'preferred' (not 'had a preferences'). 'Rather than collect the formal clothes' is wrong; use 'instead of buying formal clothes.' 'Preferences' should be singular 'preference' if used, but 'preferred to buy' is clearer. Match past viewpoint: 'I thought' and 'they were.' Use comparative 'cheaper than other clothes.'