Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct grammar (e.g., “it was one of my favorite means of transport”), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add a specific detail or short example to make your answer vivid (where you rode, who you rode with, or a memorable event). Use linking words like “also” or “for example.”

예시: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child, and it was one of my favorite means of transport. I often rode around my neighborhood and sometimes cycled to nearby towns with my family. For example, I remember a weekend ride to the park where we picnicked by the lake.

제안: Give a direct, concise opinion first, then support it with specific observations and a linking word to contrast points. Remove irrelevant phrases (e.g., “it's a great question”) and filler words. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., “popular,” “increasing,” “commute”) and provide a precise example or a brief reason why trends differ (infrastructure, culture, distance).

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are becoming more popular in my country. Recently I have noticed more people cycling in my town because of new bike lanes and lower commuting costs. However, many people still walk or use public transport for short distances, especially where infrastructure is limited.

× it was one of my favorite, uh, transport to use since a kid.

✓ It was one of my favorite means of transport to use since I was a kid.

Original sentence uses 'transport' uncountably and misorders words; 'favorite' should modify a countable noun or 'means of transport'. Also 'since a kid' is informal and missing subject; use 'since I was a kid' to indicate time up to now. Suggestion: use 'means of transport' or 'forms of transport' and include 'I was' after 'since'.

× Uh, was a big lover of cycling around my neighborhood and other towns, uh, with my family as well.

✓ I was a big lover of cycling around my neighborhood and other towns with my family as well.

The original sentence omits the subject pronoun 'I' before 'was', creating a sentence without a clear subject. Add 'I' to form a complete clause. Also remove extra commas for smoother English.

× So I would say it's most, uh, interesting.

✓ So I would say it was most interesting.

The context refers to past experiences, so tense should be past ('was' not 'is'). The filler 'uh' and comma placement interrupt the sentence; remove them for clarity. 'Most interesting' is idiomatic to express a strong opinion.

× Oh, uh, it's AI would say it's a great question.

✓ Oh, I would say it's a great question.

'AI' appears to be a typo for 'I'. Also 'it's I would say' is ungrammatical. Correct structure is 'I would say it's a great question.' Ensure speaker uses 'I' and places clauses in correct order.

× Uh, to be honest, uh, I'm seeing more and more, uh, people bicycling in my Old Town.

✓ To be honest, I'm seeing more and more people bicycling in my old town.

Sentence has excessive fillers and an unnecessary capital letter in 'Old Town'. Grammar-wise 'I'm seeing more and more people bicycling' is acceptable present continuous for a current trend; just remove fillers and correct capitalization to 'old town'.

× Uh, but on the other hand, I see many people are walking to their jobs or their areas.

✓ But on the other hand, I see many people walking to their jobs or to nearby areas.

Combine verbs correctly: 'I see many people walking' (not 'I see many people are walking' which mixes reporting verb 'see' with a clause. Also 'their areas' is vague; 'nearby areas' or 'their workplaces' is clearer. Remove redundant 'Uh' and align prepositions: 'to their jobs' and 'to nearby areas'.