Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise, use standard contractions and a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "so" twice). Also use a linking word to connect reason. Maintain under 5 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike as a child because I was terrified of falling, so my parents decided not to buy one. However, I watched other children ride and wished I could join them when I felt braver.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence and avoid filler words (e.g., "like"). Use one linking word to provide a reason and include a specific example or context to support your claim. Keep sentences concise and varied in structure.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many commuters use bicycles to travel to markets and schools, especially in crowded urban areas.

× I didn't have any bike as a child 'cause I was so afraid of falling, so my parents didn't buy me one.

✓ I didn't have any bikes as a child because I was so afraid of falling, so my parents didn't buy me one.

The word 'bike' should be plural after 'any' when referring to an unspecified number in a negative context. Use 'any bikes' or rephrase to 'a bike'. Also expand the contraction 'cause' to 'because' for formality and clarity.

× Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country 'cause it is very convenient and it is like easy to go anywhere.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country because they are very convenient and make it easy to go anywhere.

There are several issues: 'cause' should be 'because'; 'it' is incorrect pronoun for 'bikes' (plural) so use 'they'; 'it is like easy' is informal and ungrammatical — use 'make it easy' to show cause-effect. This corrects pronoun agreement and conjunction use.

× So people, most of the time people prefer to go to different places by their bikes.

✓ Most of the time, people prefer to go to different places by bike.

The original repeats 'people' unnecessarily and has awkward word order. Removing redundancy and using the idiomatic phrase 'by bike' (not 'by their bikes') makes the sentence clearer and more natural. Also add a comma after 'Most of the time' for readability.