Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is correct but too short. Give a brief topic sentence then add 1–2 specific supporting details (e.g., who gave it to you, how often you rode it, or a short memory). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to make it coherent and keep to under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bike when I was seven, and I rode it almost every day after school. Because it was close to my house and safe to ride, I quickly learned to balance and gained a lot of confidence.

제안: Your answer has the right idea but is unclear and contains fillers. State your main idea, then give clear, specific reasons with linking words (for example “because” and “for example”). Avoid vague phrases like “all of them” and unnecessary hesitations. Keep it within 2–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or school, and cities have built bike lanes to make cycling safer.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because of, uh, all of them. It's really helped their transport service.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because of how useful they are. They've really helped the transport system.

The original contains a vague and incorrect pronoun reference: 'all of them' does not clearly refer to bikes and is unnatural here. 'It's really helped their transport service' mixes singular 'it' with plural idea and uses 'their' ambiguously; also 'transport service' is better as 'transport system'. Corrected sentence uses clear pronouns ('they' for bikes) and matches plural agreement, and uses present perfect 'They've really helped' to indicate an effect continuing to the present, which fits the question about popularity. Suggestion: replace vague pronouns with specific references, ensure pronoun number (singular/plural) matches the noun, and use appropriate noun phrase ('transport system').