Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha net ve akıcı olmalı; gereksiz duraklamalar ve yanlış kelime kullanımı azaltılmalı. Önce doğrudan soruya yanıt verin (ör. Evet/Hayır + kısa açıklama), sonra kısa destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlenizi mantıklı parçalara bölün ve doğru kelimeyi (bike yerine bag hatası gibi) kullanın. Örnek adımlar: 1) Konu cümlesi: ‘Yes, I had a bike.’ 2) Destekleyici detay: neden veya nasıl hatırladığınızı belirtin. 3) Cümleleri 2–3 uzun cümlede sınırlayın. Ayrıca telaffuz duraklamalarını (‘umm’, ‘uh’) azaltmak için kısa duraklamalar yerine düşünce zinciri pratiği yapın.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I remember it was quite difficult for me to learn to ride at first because I was small and unsteady. However, after a few weeks of practice with my father, I could ride around the neighborhood confidently.

제안: Cevap daha net dayanaklarla desteklenmeli; karışık ve hatalı kelime kullanımı (neighbor vs neighbourhood; write vs ride) düzeltilmeli. Önce doğrudan görüşünüzü söyleyin, sonra bir veya iki özgül örnek/kanıt verin ve bağlaçlarla tutarlı bir yapı kurun. Ayrıca şaşkınlık ifadesini daha doğal cümlelerle verin. Kısa ve doğru kelimeler kullanın; bölümleri 2–3 cümleyle sınırlayın.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, in my neighborhood I rarely see people cycling, even though there is plenty of open space. This surprises me because cycling would be a convenient and healthy way to travel here.

× Yes, I had a bag when I was child and it was being but umm, I remember that uh, it was too hard for me to ride a bike. Umm, so I really.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I remember it was too hard for me to ride a bike, so I really couldn't ride well.

The original sentence contains multiple sentence structure issues: wrong noun (bag instead of bike), missing article 'a' before 'child', the phrase 'it was being' is ungrammatical, and sentence fragments ('so I really.'). Suggestion: use clear subject-verb structures and complete clauses. Replace 'bag' with 'bike' to match the question; add the article 'a' before 'child'; remove 'it was being' and use 'I remember it was too hard for me to ride a bike' or 'I remember that it was too hard for me to ride a bike'; finish the final idea with a complete clause such as 'so I really couldn't ride well.'

× Well, I don't really believe the bikes are popular in my country, especially in my neighbor because I haven't seen anybody ride a bike and it was so surprised to me because there is a lot of empty area and everyone can write.

✓ Well, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country, especially in my neighborhood, because I haven't seen anyone riding a bike; it surprised me because there is a lot of open space and everyone could ride.

This sentence has several structure and word choice errors: 'believe the bikes are popular' is better as 'think bikes are popular'; 'my neighbor' should be 'my neighborhood'; 'anybody ride a bike' -> 'anyone riding a bike' for natural phrasing; 'it was so surprised to me' should be 'it surprised me' (passive misuse); 'empty area' -> 'open space'; 'everyone can write' is a wrong word (write vs ride). Suggestion: use correct noun 'neighborhood', use 'anyone riding' or 'anyone who rides', use active phrasing 'it surprised me', and correct 'write' to 'ride'.