Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be precise and keep sentences correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief detail), then give one or two specific supporting details (age, who gave it, how you used it). Use past tense consistently and avoid unrelated words (e.g. 'car' vs 'bike'). Reduce filler words like 'uh'.

예시: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. I received it for my tenth birthday from my parents, and I rode it every day to visit friends and explore my neighborhood. It helped me learn balance and gave me a lot of independence.

제안: Give a clear opinion sentence then add concise specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct grammar (e.g. 'pupils' -> 'students', 'ride to school'). Avoid repetition and keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, I often see many people cycling on the streets, and many students ride their bikes to school because it is cheap and convenient. In addition, cycling is encouraged in some cities to reduce traffic and pollution.

× Yeah, uh, as far as I can remember, I have a new car when I'm in primary school. It is a gift for my parents and it is my birthday gift.

✓ Yeah, uh, as far as I can remember, I had a new bike when I was in primary school. It was a gift from my parents for my birthday.

The student is describing a past situation, so present tense verbs (have, I'm) are incorrect; use past tense (had, was). Also 'car' is likely wrong given the question about a bike; change to 'bike'. Use 'from my parents' rather than 'for my parents' to indicate who gave the gift, and 'for my birthday' is the usual phrase to indicate the occasion. Suggestion: use past simple for past events and standard prepositional phrase 'a gift from X for Y'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× It is a gift for my parents and it is my birthday gift.

✓ It was a gift from my parents and it was my birthday present.

Beyond tense errors, word choice and preposition are suboptimal: 'a gift for my parents' suggests the parents were the recipients; use 'from my parents' to show the giver. 'Birthday present' is more natural than repeating 'birthday gift'. Maintain past tense 'was' for consistency. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions and natural collocations (gift from, birthday present). Grammar problem type ID:13

× Yeah, definitely. When I walk on the streets I always find many people riding and lots of pupils especially they usually ride into go to school.

✓ Yeah, definitely. When I walk on the streets I often see many people riding bikes, and many pupils usually ride to go to school.

The original sentence mixes tenses and has awkward structure: 'When I walk' (present simple for habitual action) is okay, but 'I always find' is less natural than 'I often see' or 'I always see'. 'Lots of pupils especially they usually' is redundant and ungrammatical; remove the extra pronoun 'they' and position adverbs properly. 'Ride into go to school' is incorrect; use 'ride to school' or 'ride bikes to go to school'. Suggestion: use consistent present simple for habitual observations, avoid redundant pronouns, and use correct verb phrases like 'ride to school'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× When I walk on the streets I always find many people riding and lots of pupils especially they usually ride into go to school.

✓ When I walk on the streets I often see many people riding bikes, and many pupils usually ride bikes to school.

Prepositional and verb phrase errors: 'walk on the streets' is acceptable but 'walk along the streets' or simply 'walk the streets' may be better; more importantly 'ride into go to school' is wrong — use 'ride to school'. Also include the object 'bikes' after 'riding' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('to school') and include necessary objects for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:11