Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, fluency and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and articles, then add one supporting detail. Use linking words if adding extra information. For example, say: “No, I didn’t have a motorbike as a child.” then add a brief supporting detail: “Instead, I usually rode a bicycle to school because it was convenient.” Also correct mistakes: "When I was child" → "When I was a child," and "go on school" → "go to school."

예시: No, I didn’t have a motorbike when I was a child. Instead, I usually rode a bicycle to school because it was the easiest and cheapest way to travel, and it kept me active.

제안: Work on clarity, word choice, and grammar. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two concise supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid informal or awkward phrases like "fitness freak" and "preferably go on." Use correct comparative structures: "prefer bicycles to motorbikes." For example: "Motorbikes are not very popular; people prefer bicycles because cycling is cheap and good exercise."

예시: Motorbikes are not very popular in my country. Instead, most people prefer bicycles because they are inexpensive and good for health, so many choose cycling for short trips.

× When I was child I didn't have any bike.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and unnecessary use of 'any' with a singular countable noun. Also missing comma after introductory time phrase improves readability. Use 'a bike' for a single countable item. Suggestion: insert 'a' and replace 'any bike' with 'a bike'.

× I just used to go on school on a bicycle.

✓ I just used to go to school by bicycle.

Incorrect preposition 'on' with 'school' and awkward preposition 'on' with 'a bicycle'. The correct collocations are 'go to school' and 'go by bicycle' (or 'ride a bicycle'). Also omit 'a' before 'bicycle' depends on variety; 'by bicycle' is natural. Suggestion: use 'go to school by bicycle' or 'ride a bicycle to school'.

× No, basically in my country bikes are not much popular.

✓ No. Basically, bikes are not very popular in my country.

Awkward word order and incorrect use of 'much' with 'popular'. 'Much' is not natural before adjectives; use 'very' or 'so'. Place 'in my country' at end for natural English. Add punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: say 'bikes are not very popular in my country.'

× Instead bicycles are popular because my country people are very fitness freak and they preferably go on bicycles then on bikes.

✓ Instead, bicycles are popular because people in my country are very fitness-conscious and they prefer to ride bicycles rather than motorbikes.

Multiple issues: 'my country people' is incorrect; use 'people in my country'. 'Fitness freak' is informal and needs an adjective 'fitness-conscious'. 'Preferably go on bicycles' is wrong verb and adverb use; use 'prefer to ride bicycles'. 'Then on bikes' is incorrect comparative conjunction; use 'rather than' and specify 'motorbikes' if contrasting bicycles with motorbikes. Suggestion: use clearer phrasing like 'people in my country are fitness-conscious and prefer to ride bicycles rather than motorbikes.'