Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, avoid filled pauses (umm), and complete your sentence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar: use past simple and appropriate articles (e.g., “a four-wheeled bike”).

예시: Yes, I had a bike from when I was about five. My parents first taught me on a four-wheeled learner bike, and later I practised on a two-wheeled bike until I could ride unaided.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, avoid repetition and unclear phrases, and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement). Use linking words to add a specific reason or example. Remove confusing or irrelevant remarks.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or school, and there are frequent community cycling events.

× Yes, I had a bike since I was umm 5 years old maybe I was able to ride the bike umm because my parents taught me with the four wheel bike 1st and then I was trying to umm ride the two wheels bike without the.

✓ Yes, I had a bike since I was about 5 years old. Maybe I was able to ride the bike because my parents taught me with a four-wheel bike first, and then I tried to ride the two-wheel bike without it.

The sentence mixes past simple and present tense phrasing and uses informal fillers. Use 'about' instead of 'umm' and 'first' spelled correctly. 'I was able to ride' is acceptable but simpler past 'I could ride' or 'I learned to ride' fits; here 'was able to' is kept but restructured. 'Four wheel' should be hyphenated as 'four-wheel' and 'two wheels bike' should be 'two-wheel bike' or 'two-wheeled bike'. Also the final clause needed an object 'it' to indicate without training/wheels. Break into two sentences for clarity. Suggested improvement: practice forming clear past-tense sequences and use hyphenation for compound adjectives (four-wheel, two-wheel).

× Yeah, for sure. Everyone knows how. I mean, not everyone, but most of the people knows how to ride the bike and it's kind of a joke, but our people from the from my country are really crazy in bikes. So even if you don't really steal.

✓ Yeah, for sure. Everyone knows how. I mean, not everyone, but most people know how to ride a bike, and it's kind of a joke, but people from my country are really crazy about bikes. So even if you don't really own one, ...

'Most of the people knows' is incorrect: 'people' is plural and requires the verb 'know'. Use 'most people know' or 'most of the people know'. Also 'ride the bike' is better as 'ride a bike' in general statements. 'Our people from the from my country' is redundant and awkward; use 'people from my country'. 'Crazy in bikes' is incorrect preposition; use 'crazy about bikes'. The final fragment 'So even if you don't really steal.' is incomplete and likely incorrect word choice; possibly intended 'own one' or 'have one'. Suggestion: check subject-verb agreement and choose correct prepositions (crazy about), and avoid repetition and sentence fragments; complete the final thought.