Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Correct small grammar errors (e.g. "an age limit," "at a very young age"). Try to keep it within 2–3 sentences and use a smoother connector such as "because" or "so" only once.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike as a child because there is an age limit of 18 for riding bikes in my country. As a result, most youngsters, including me, waited until adulthood before learning to ride.

제안: Organize your answer: state your opinion first, then give specific reasons using linking words (e.g. "because", "for example"). Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g. "by some free popular"). Use more precise vocabulary like "popular" and "trend" and provide one concrete example.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many young people follow motorcycle vloggers online. For example, numerous YouTube channels feature bike tours and gear reviews, which has helped make riding fashionable among teenagers and young adults.

× No, I didn't have any bike because in in my country there's a age limit for riding bikes, like 18 years of age.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because in my country there's an age limit for riding bikes, like 18 years old.

Use of articles: 'any bike' is unnatural in this affirmative context; 'a bike' is correct. Also 'a age limit' is incorrect because 'age' begins with a vowel sound so it needs the article 'an' or better 'there's an age limit' or rephrase; here 'there's an age limit' is appropriate. '18 years of age' can be simplified to '18 years old.' Remove the duplicated word 'in.' Suggestion: say 'No, I didn't have a bike because in my country there's an age limit for riding bikes: you must be 18 years old.'

× So that's why I didn't have any bike at the very young age.

✓ So that's why I didn't have a bike at a very young age.

Sentence structure and article use: 'any bike' is inappropriate in this context; use 'a bike.' 'the very young age' is awkward—use 'a very young age' or 'when I was very young.' Suggestion: 'So that's why I didn't have a bike when I was very young.'

× Yeah, I do think that by some free popular in my country because, uh, there are so many riders on the YouTube as well.

✓ Yeah, I do think that bikes are quite popular in my country because there are so many riders on YouTube as well.

Multiple issues: sentence structure and missing subject for 'popular'—you need a subject and verb like 'bikes are popular.' Remove unclear words 'by some free.' 'the YouTube' is incorrect; use 'YouTube' without an article. Suggestion: 'Yeah, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people post riding videos on YouTube.'

× They make vlogs and earn money from there.

✓ They make vlogs and earn money from them.

Pronoun reference: 'there' refers to a place, but you mean to refer to the vlogs or the platform; use 'from them' (the vlogs) or 'from it' (the platform). Suggestion: 'They make vlogs and earn money from them.'

× There's a very much a trend of riding a bike.

✓ There's a strong trend for riding bikes.

Article and adjective order: 'There's a very much a trend' is ungrammatical. Use 'a strong trend' or 'very much of a trend' but better 'There's a strong trend for riding bikes.' Also match plural 'bikes' with general meaning. Suggestion: 'Riding bikes is a strong trend.'