Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Provide a clear, direct topic sentence, use correct tense and vocabulary, reduce hesitations and repetitions, and give one specific supporting detail. Keep answers natural and within 3–4 sentences. Link ideas (for example: “When I was... so I... because...”).

예시: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child and I rode it every day after school with my best friends. When I was in primary school, we would race each other to the park near our homes, which was free and a lot of fun. Because it was close by, I often chose cycling instead of walking.

제안: Start with a direct opinion sentence, avoid filler words and repetition, use precise vocabulary (e.g., “bike-sharing schemes” or “public bikes”), and give one clear reason with a specific example. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many cities have public bike-sharing schemes. For example, you can often see yellow rental bikes near subway stations and busy streets, which people use for short trips to work or shopping.

× OK, so I have a back when I was a child, I used to ride a bike after school with my best friends.

✓ OK, so I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it after school with my best friends.

The original mixes present tense 'have' with past context and runs two clauses together without proper punctuation, causing sentence structure and tense errors. Change 'have' to past 'had' to match 'when I was a child', split into two sentences, and replace 'ride a bike' with 'ride it' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: Keep past events in past tense and use clear sentence boundaries.

× Uh, when I was in a primary school and there's quite umm, I ran a bike fee that may be a free and enjoyable.

✓ Uh, when I was in primary school there were quite a few bikes; riding a bike was fun and enjoyable.

This sentence contains incorrect verb forms and wrong expressions: 'there's' (there is) should be plural 'there were' to match 'quite a few bikes'; 'I ran a bike fee' is ungrammatical—likely intended 'there were quite a few bikes' or 'I rode a bike a lot'. Use 'riding a bike was fun' to express enjoyment. Also remove 'a' before 'primary school' in this variety of English. Suggestion: Use 'there were' for plural existence in past and use clear verbs like 'rode' or noun phrases like 'riding a bike' for activities.

× Yep, bikes are popular pre Wheeling our country actually, umm, because we have uh there there are are yellow bike umm, you can see the bike around over the city and around the subway and the the the export of the subway.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country. Actually, we have yellow bikes for public use; you can see them all over the city and near subway stations.

The original has many disfluencies, word repetition, incorrect preposition 'pre Wheeling', and awkward noun phrases like 'the export of the subway'. Correct by using 'in our country' for location, 'yellow bikes for public use' to clarify meaning, and 'all over the city' and 'near subway stations' for correct prepositions and collocations. Suggestion: Eliminate filler words, avoid repetitions, and choose standard prepositions ('in', 'over', 'near') and nouns ('stations') to convey location.