Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and complete your idea. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unfinished sentences and redundant phrasing. Also include a brief closing comment to show completeness.

예시: Yes — I did. My parents bought me a small bicycle when I was six, and my older brother gave me his old helmet and practice tips. At first I used training wheels, so I enjoyed riding around the yard, but I never learned to ride without them. Overall, it was a fun part of my childhood.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and add a specific reason or example using linking words to make your answer more informative. Try to use slightly wider vocabulary (e.g., popular, common, widespread) and include one specific context or comparison to show depth.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in the Philippines. For example, many families buy bikes for their children to ride during the long summer holidays, and groups of friends often cycle together in parks or around neighborhoods. Additionally, in some cities people use bikes as a cheap, convenient way to travel short distances.

× When I was a child I was given a bike by my parents, one from my older brother and one for me.

✓ When I was a child I was given a bike by my parents: one belonged to my older brother and one was for me.

The original sentence uses passive 'was given' correctly, but the following clause 'one from my older brother and one for me' is unclear and lacks proper verb forms. The phrase 'one from my older brother' omits a verb and should indicate possession or origin using past tense or past participle ('belonged to' or 'was from'). Also 'one for me' is awkward; 'one was for me' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use explicit verbs to show possession or origin.'},{

× Unfortunately, I did not learn how to ride the bike by myself.

✓ Unfortunately, I did not learn how to ride the bike by myself at that time.

The sentence uses past simple correctly to express a past inability, but adding a time phrase such as 'at that time' or 'when I was younger' makes the reference clearer. No change to tense is required; this is a clarity improvement.

× I had enjoyed it for some time with training wheels, but eventually.

✓ I enjoyed it for some time with training wheels, but eventually I stopped using the bike.

The original combines past perfect 'had enjoyed' with no clear reference point and ends with the unfinished connector 'but eventually.' Use simple past 'enjoyed' to narrate a past habit, and complete the contrast clause by stating what happened 'I stopped using the bike.' Ensure sentences are complete and verbs are present to avoid sentence fragments.

× I would say yes.

✓ I would say yes.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; it correctly uses a modal-like conditional 'would say' to give a polite opinion. No correction needed.

× Bikes are popular in the Philippines.

✓ Bikes are popular in the Philippines.

This simple present sentence correctly states a general fact and needs no change.

× Children ride their bikes during the summer and they ride together with friends.

✓ Children ride their bikes during the summer and ride together with friends.

The original is grammatically correct, but repeating 'they' is redundant. Use parallel structure by omitting the second subject for conciseness: '...and ride together with friends.' This preserves the simple present tense used for habitual actions.