Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct past tense, and add one brief supporting detail. Avoid unnecessary words and keep it to 1–2 sentences.

예시: Yes. I had a bike when I was about eight or nine years old. I used to ride it to visit my friends and practice tricks on weekends.

제안: Make a clear main statement, then give two specific and coherent reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (especially verbs and pronouns) and avoid filler words. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Firstly, many people use them for exercise and short trips, which helps their health; secondly, children enjoy riding bikes for fun, and adults often use them for commuting in crowded areas.

× Yes, when I was a kid, around 8 to 9 years old at that time I have a bike.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, around 8 or 9 years old, I had a bike.

The sentence describes a past situation so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Have' is present tense; use 'had'. Also '8 to 9 years old at that time' is awkward; use 'around 8 or 9 years old'. Add commas for clarity.

× Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because it first that it also help people in taking care of your their health and children also love playing on and riding bicycles during their childhood and uh, people who are adult they also.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they help people take care of their health. Children also love riding bicycles during their childhood, and adults do too.

This sentence has multiple structural and grammar errors. 'It first that it also help' is ungrammatical; replace with a clear clause 'they help people take care of their health.' Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'bikes' and plural verb 'help' (subject-verb agreement). 'Taking care of your their health' mixes pronouns; use 'their health'. 'Playing on and riding bicycles' is redundant and awkward; use 'riding bicycles'. 'People who are adult they also' is incoherent; use 'and adults do too.' Break the long run-on into two sentences for clarity.