Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Start with a direct, grammatically correct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences). Add one brief supporting detail (e.g., who gifted the bikes or which you liked most) using a linking word. Correct verb tense: use past simple. Improve word order and remove filler words.

예시: Yes. I had three bikes when I was a child. One was red, one was brown and the other was black. I liked the red one best because it was faster and I rode it to school every day.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “poor community” without context; be more precise and neutral. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., common, practical, affordable) and correct grammar (use present simple).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. In particular, they are common in rural and low-income areas because they are affordable and practical for short trips. Moreover, many people prefer bikes to avoid traffic in cities.

× And when I was a child, I have I had three bikes, one is red, the other is brown and the last one is black.

✓ When I was a child, I had three bikes: one was red, one was brown, and the last one was black.

Problems: incorrect present tense 'have' used with past time reference and disfluent 'I have I had'; inconsistent present tense 'is' for past context. This fits Present tense issue (ID 6) and Past tense issue (ID 5) and Sentence structure errors (ID 26). Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past state ('had', 'was'). Remove redundant words and keep tense consistent. Use parallel structure for the list and a colon or commas to separate items.

× Yes, people in my country use bikes a lot because in the poor community the majority of the people use bikes.

✓ Yes, people in my country use bikes a lot because in poorer communities the majority of people use them.

Problems: awkward article and noun phrase 'in the poor community' and unnecessary repetition 'the majority of the people' and repeated 'use bikes'. This matches Incorrect use of prepositions/articles/quantifiers (IDs 11 and 22 and 14) and Pronoun use (ID 12). Suggestion: Use plural 'communities' or 'the poorer parts of the country' and use pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition. Use 'poorer' (comparative adjective) to describe relative economic condition.