Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, answer more directly with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 short sentences) and use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I didn’t use it much because I preferred playing football with my friends. As a result, I usually rode it only when I needed to go a bit farther than I could walk.

제안: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence and support it with one or two specific reasons. Avoid long hesitations and incorrect verb forms; use simple past vs present correctly and linking words like 'because' or 'now' to show contrast.

예시: I think bikes used to be more popular than they are now. Twenty years ago many people rode bikes to work or school, but now fewer people do so because more families own cars and public transport has improved.

× Yes, of course all, uh, children in my neighborhood had uh, a bike and, uh, to be honest, I, I didn't like it a lot because, uh, I was uh, preferring, uh, football to playing with the, my bike.

✓ Yes, of course, all the children in my neighborhood had a bike, and, to be honest, I didn't like it much because I preferred playing football to riding my bike.

Pronoun and article issues: 'all, uh, children' needs the definite article 'the' to specify that group. 'the, my bike' mixes articles and possessive pronoun; use 'my bike' only. Verb form/tense: 'I was preferring' is unnatural; stative or habitual preference uses simple past 'I preferred'. 'like it a lot' is acceptable but 'like it much' or 'didn't like it much' sounds more natural here. Also replace 'playing with the my bike' with 'riding my bike' for correct collocation. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific groups, avoid duplicating articles and pronouns, use simple past for past preferences, and choose correct verb collocations (ride a bike).

× It was useful, yes, but not anymore.

✓ It was useful, yes, but not anymore.

The sentence itself is grammatical, but in context of the question 'Do you think bikes are popular in your country?' a clearer tense and phrasing would be 'They were useful, yes, but not anymore' or 'Bikes were useful, yes, but not anymore.' If keeping the original, ensure the subject is explicit ('It' is vague). Suggestion: make the subject explicit to match the question and maintain consistent plural: 'Bikes were useful, yes, but not anymore.'

× You can you can say that before, maybe for 20 years ago, all people were driving bikes, they going with the with it to work and to study, but.

✓ You could say that, maybe 20 years ago, almost everyone rode bikes; they would use them to go to work and to study.

Several issues: 'You can you can' is a repetition; 'before, maybe for 20 years ago' is ungrammatical — use 'maybe 20 years ago' or 'about 20 years ago'. 'All people' is better expressed as 'almost everyone' or 'everyone'. 'Were driving bikes' is incorrect collocation in English — we 'ride' bikes, not 'drive' them. 'They going with the with it' lacks auxiliary and has extra words; use 'they used them to go' or 'they would use them to go'. Also tense/modal: 'could say' fits a hypothetical past reference. Suggestions: remove repetition, use correct time expression, choose appropriate quantifier, use 'ride' for bikes, and include auxiliaries for continuous or habitual past ('would' or 'used to').