Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and grammar, and add one concrete detail. Keep it natural and concise (max 5 sentences). For example, say when you had the bike, describe it briefly, and give a specific memory using linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “and”). Also correct common errors: say “I had a bike when I was 12” (past simple), “it was pink” (not “pink colors”), and “I rode it everywhere” (not “right about to everywhere”).

예시: I had a bike when I was twelve. It was a small, pink bicycle with a basket, so I loved taking it to my friend’s house. Because my neighborhood was quiet, I often rode it around the park after school. I was very happy and proud to have it.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and one short example. Use linking words correctly and avoid repeating “because.” Fix grammar and word order (e.g., “bikes are popular” not “the bike popular”). Make sentences concise and complete. Mention facts like geography, commuting habits, bike-sharing systems, or last-mile convenience to be specific.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in Taiwan because the country is relatively small and distances between places are short. Moreover, many people use bikes for short trips after taking the MRT, so bicycles are convenient for the ‘last mile.’ For example, commuters often rent shared bikes at MRT stations to get from the station to their homes.

× Yes I did when I was 12 and I have one bike.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was 12, I had a bike.

The student is speaking about a past situation. 'Have' in present tense is incorrect; use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Also split into two sentences and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use past simple for actions/states that occurred in the past (e.g., 'I had a bike when I was 12').

× It's so cute and lovely and I remember it's pink colors.

✓ It was so cute and lovely, and I remember it was pink.

The sentence mixes present tense 'it's' with past context and uses 'pink colors' incorrectly—'pink' is an adjective describing the bike, not a plural noun. Use past tense 'was' and the adjective 'pink'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use adjectives properly (e.g., 'it was pink').

× I was right about to everywhere.

✓ I went everywhere on it.

The phrase 'right about to everywhere' is ungrammatical and unclear. The student likely means they rode the bike everywhere. Rephrase to a simple past statement: 'I went everywhere on it' or 'I rode it everywhere.' Suggestion: express intended action with a clear subject-verb-object structure.

× I was so happy in that time.

✓ I was so happy at that time.

The expression 'in that time' is nonstandard in this context. Use the preposition 'at' with 'that time' to indicate a specific moment in the past. The tense (past simple 'was') is correct; only the preposition is wrong. Suggestion: use 'at that time' or 'during that time' depending on nuance.

× Yes, I think so because the bike popular, because it's easy and convenient because in my country which means Taiwan, Taiwan is not too big.

✓ Yes, I think so because bikes are popular; they are easy and convenient. In my country, Taiwan, the country is not very large.

Multiple issues: 'the bike popular' lacks a verb and number agreement—should be 'bikes are popular' (plural subject and verb). Repeated 'because' creates run-on structure; break into clear sentences. 'Not too big' is informal; 'not very large' is clearer. Suggestion: use proper subject-verb structure ('bikes are popular') and avoid repeating conjunctions unnecessarily.

× So if you take the public transport, for example, we if we take the MRT when you get off the MRT if you want to go home or go.

✓ For example, if you take public transport like the MRT, when you get off and want to go home, ...

This sentence has mixed subjects ('you' and 'we') and is incomplete. Also 'take the public transport' is acceptable but 'take public transport' is more natural. The sentence needs consistent subject pronouns and completion. Suggestion: choose one subject ('you' or 'we') and finish the clause (e.g., 'you usually ride a bike the rest of the way').