Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and grammar: give a direct topic sentence, then one or two clear supporting reasons with correct tense and vocabulary. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid filler words. Be specific about who made the decision and why (e.g., safety concerns, traffic). Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was unsafe. For example, they were worried about traffic and feared I might fall on busy roads, so they preferred I walk or use public transport instead.

제안: Provide a clear, coherent opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples. Start with a topic sentence, then add 1–2 reasons using linking words (for example, because, therefore). Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "bikes" not "Spike", "young people" not "innocents"). Avoid repetition and unclear statements.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many young people use bicycles or motorbikes to commute to school or work, and they are also useful in emergencies when traffic is heavy.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was outside.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'when I was outside' which is illogical in context; the question asked about childhood. Use the past time phrase 'when I was a child' to match the past tense 'didn't have' and the intended meaning.

× My parents don't love to buy big instead for my safety.

✓ My parents didn't want to buy a big one for my safety.

The student used present tense 'don't love' and incorrect word order. The question refers to past habits, so use past 'didn't want'. 'Buy big' lacks a noun; use 'a big one' to refer to a bike. 'Instead' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× They may worry about wor.

✓ They might have worried about my safety.

'May worry' is present-tense modal, but the context is past concern. Use 'might have worried' to express past possibility. 'wor' is unclear; replace with 'my safety' to express the reason.

× They may worried about uh from I was fed or right in opposite route.

✓ They might have worried that I would fall or go the wrong way.

This sentence has multiple errors: 'may worried' mixes modal and past participle; correct form is 'might have worried.' 'from I was fed' and 'right in opposite route' are ungrammatical. Clarify intended meaning: concern about falling ('fall') or going the wrong way ('go the wrong way'). Use 'that' to introduce the clause and 'would' for past-in-past modality.

× Yeah, I think Spike are popular in our country because many young generations are.

✓ Yeah, I think bicycles are popular in our country because many young people are.

'Spike' is incorrect word choice; use 'bicycles' or 'bikes'. 'Are popular' is fine, but 'many young generations are' is incorrect and awkward; use 'many young people' to refer to the group. Ensure subject and noun forms match.

× Because many younger innocents are like to ride a bike.

✓ Because many young people like to ride bikes.

'Younger innocents' is unnatural; use 'young people'. Remove the extra 'are' before 'like' and use the base verb 'like'. Use plural 'bikes' to match general statement.

× Many of them are for emergency.

✓ Many of them use bikes for emergencies.

The original lacks a clear verb and misuses 'for emergency.' Rephrase to 'use bikes for emergencies' to indicate purpose. Keep plural 'emergencies' for general situations.

× Many of them are.

✓ Many of them do.

The fragment 'Many of them are' is incomplete. Replace with 'Many of them do' to avoid repetition and indicate agreement with the previous statement (that they like to ride bikes).