Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure, be concise, and use linking words to make the response more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., how old you were, where you rode it, a brief reason why it was special). Avoid repetition and keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. I had a bike from about the age of eight, and I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood. It was a gift from my father, so it felt very special, and I remember learning to balance and ride for the first time. That bike gives me fond memories of playing with friends and exploring nearby parks.

제안: Correct grammar and avoid word repetition, add one clear reason and a specific example or comparison. Use linking words (for example, moreover, because) to connect ideas and make the answer coherent. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., affordable, eco-friendly).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. Moreover, with rising fuel and car costs, many people choose bicycles or motorbikes to save money and reduce pollution. For example, commuters in my city often cycle to work to avoid traffic and cut expenses.

× When I was children, yes I did have a bike and I love to ride it daily as it was one of the greatest gifts given by my father to me as it was very convenient at that time and I love to ride it and it's a memory that I will always cherish.

✓ When I was a child, yes I did have a bike and I loved to ride it daily as it was one of the greatest gifts my father gave me; it was very convenient at that time and I loved riding it, and it's a memory I will always cherish.

Multiple errors: 'When I was children' uses plural 'children' but subject is singular, so use 'a child' (Singular and plural issue). Tense inconsistency: question asks about past, so change present 'love' to past 'loved' for actions in childhood (Present tense issue / Past tense issue) but only correct per provided list: primary issue identified is singular/plural. Also improve phrasing: 'given by my father to me' is wordy; use 'my father gave me'. Change 'I love to ride it daily' to 'I loved to ride it daily' and 'I love to ride it' to 'I loved riding it' to match past context. Use a semicolon or commas to break run-on sentence into clearer clauses (Sentence structure errors). Suggestions: use 'When I was a child' for single-child reference, keep past tense consistently for past experiences, replace wordy passive forms with active voice, and split long sentences into shorter ones for clarity.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country as it's a great way to go from one place to another and motorcycles and car are now getting expensive and expensive.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country as they're a great way to go from one place to another, and motorcycles and cars are becoming increasingly expensive.

Errors: 'it's' refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use 'they're' for plural subjects (Third person singular issue). 'motorcycles and car' mixes plural and singular; both should be plural 'motorcycles and cars' (Singular and plural issue). Repetitive 'expensive and expensive' should be 'becoming increasingly expensive' for correct comparative phrasing (Comparative/adverb usage). Suggestions: ensure verb and pronoun agree in number with their subjects, keep coordinate nouns consistent in number, and avoid repetition by using 'increasingly'.

× So many people in my country love to ride bikes as it's very convenient and it's also a very great way to save environment.

✓ So many people in my country love to ride bikes as they're very convenient and it's also a great way to save the environment.

Errors: 'it's' refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use 'they're' for correct pronoun agreement (Incorrect use of pronouns). 'a very great way' is redundant; 'a great way' suffices (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'save environment' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'environment' (Article errors). Suggestions: match pronouns to plural nouns, avoid redundant modifiers, and include 'the' with 'environment' to be grammatically correct.