Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child.”). Then add one or two supporting details using linking words (e.g., “It belonged to my father and was black, so I liked riding it because it was sturdy.”). Correct verb tense (use past for past experiences), articles (a/the), and word order.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It belonged to my father and was black, so I often borrowed it to ride around the neighborhood. Because it was sturdy, I felt confident riding it on rough roads.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “mainly”) and avoid vague statistics unless accurate. Say: “Yes, motorcycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for city traffic. For example, many people prefer brands like Suzuki for their reliability.”

예시: Yes, motorcycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to park. For example, many commuters choose brands like Suzuki due to their reliability and low running costs, so you see them everywhere in cities.

× Yes, I have bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Also, the noun needs an article: 'a bike'. Use 'had' to match past time reference and include the indefinite article: 'I had a bike.'

× Let's give for my father's is a black color.

✓ It belonged to my father; it was black.

The original sentence mixes structures and uses incorrect words for possession and color. 'Let's give' is inappropriate here. To state ownership in the past, use 'belonged to my father' or 'it was my father's.' 'Is a black color' is wordy and ungrammatical; say 'it was black.' Also align tense to past to match 'when you were a child.'

× Suzuki, it's a very popular because 99% people chose that this bike, there's a this bike is most popular.

✓ Suzuki is very popular; about 99% of people choose this bike, so it is the most popular.

Multiple problems: remove the unnecessary comma after 'Suzuki' and use a clear main clause 'Suzuki is very popular.' Use present simple 'is' to state a general fact. Percentages need 'of' ('99% of people'). Use present simple 'choose' for habitual/general statements. Replace awkward phrases ('chose that this bike', 'there's a this bike is most popular') with 'choose this bike' and 'it is the most popular.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and clear sentence structure.