Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and grammar: give a clear topic sentence, correct tense and pronouns, and finish the story concisely with a linking word. Use one or two supporting details (when and why you stopped, and whether you used it again). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child and I often rode it to the market or to my friend’s house. However, I once fell and injured my leg, so I stopped riding it for several months. After I recovered, I gradually started cycling again for short trips.

제안: Organize ideas with linking words and correct grammar: start with a topic sentence, then give two clear reasons with linking words (for example, because/also). Use specific details or examples and avoid repetition. Keep sentences concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many people use bikes to go to the market or to run short errands because it is cheap and convenient. Also, cycling is seen as a healthy form of exercise, so some people choose bikes to stay fit.

× When I was a child, I had a bicycle and I rode it when I was going to the market or to my friend.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bicycle and I rode it when I went to the market or to my friend's house.

The sentence mixes progressive 'was going' with a habitual past action. Use simple past 'went' for repeated past events. Also clarify 'to my friend' to 'to my friend's house' to complete the idea.

× But I stopped using it when my legs fall and I when I recover, I. I.

✓ But I stopped using it when my leg fell, and even after I recovered, I did not use it.

The original uses present tense 'fall' and fragmented clauses. For a past event use simple past 'fell.' Also 'legs' vs 'leg' depends on context; singular 'leg fell' is likely intended. 'When I recover' should be past 'recovered.' Use 'did not use it' to complete the idea.

× I think bike is very popular in my country because a lot of people use bike when they're go to the market, buy something trouble and form of exercise because cycling is healthy so it helps people to save money.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country because a lot of people use bikes when they go to the market to buy things and as a form of exercise. Cycling is healthy and helps people save money.

Several issues: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'They're go' is incorrect; use 'they go.' 'Buy something trouble' is unclear; 'to buy things' fits. 'Form of exercise' needs 'as a form of exercise.' The sentence is long and run-on; split into two sentences for clarity and proper grammar.