Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and minor grammatical errors (e.g., say “bike” or “bicycle,” not “bike cycle”; use past tense consistently). Add a brief reason or memory to make it more vivid.

예시: Yes — I had a bicycle as a child. At first it was a tricycle, and later my parents removed the training wheels so I could ride a two-wheeler. I loved riding it during summer vacations because it was fun and a good form of exercise, and I often rode with friends to the park.

제안: Improve clarity and grammar: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetitive phrases. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., “commute” or “mode of transport”) and correct singular/plural forms. Provide a concise example or consequence to support your point.

예시: Yes, bicycles and motorbikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, they are an affordable and convenient mode of transport for short trips. Secondly, people often use them when public transport is unreliable or during strikes, so bikes help many commuters reach work on time.

× Yes, I did have a bike cycle when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a kid.

The original uses 'did have' which is unnecessary for a simple past statement; use simple past 'had'. Also 'bike cycle' is redundant—use 'bicycle' or 'bike'. Use simple past to describe past possession. Suggestion: Use 'I had' for past possession and choose either 'bike' or 'bicycle'.

× I used to ride it and first it was a tricycle.

✓ I used to ride it; at first it was a tricycle.

The sentence needs a clearer connector. 'First it was a tricycle' lacks the preposition 'at' for the phrase 'at first'. Also joining two clauses with 'and' makes it slightly awkward. Use a semicolon or a comma with 'at first' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'at first' to indicate initial state and separate clauses properly.

× Then as I grew up I removed the side wheels.

✓ Then, as I grew up, I had the training wheels removed.

'Removed the side wheels' sounds awkward because a child typically has training wheels removed by someone or they are removed, rather than the child actively removing them. Use 'had ... removed' or 'took off the training wheels' for natural phrasing. Also add commas around the subordinate clause 'as I grew up'. Suggestion: Use passive construction 'had ... removed' or active 'took off the training wheels'.

× And so that is something which was, I love to ride cycles during the vacation, especially the summer vacation and it was fun to do that.

✓ So that was something I loved: riding bicycles during the vacations, especially summer vacation; it was fun.

Tense inconsistency and awkward pronoun/relative clause use: 'which was, I love' mixes past and present. The speaker is talking about past habits, so use past tense 'loved' and gerund 'riding'. Replace 'cycles' with 'bicycles' and streamline the sentence. Use colon or semicolon to join related ideas. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (past) when describing past habits and use gerund 'riding' to describe the activity.

× It's an exercise for me.

✓ It was good exercise for me.

The rest of the response refers to past habits, so maintain past tense: 'was' instead of 'it's'. Also 'good exercise' is more natural than 'an exercise'. Suggestion: Match tense to the context and prefer natural collocations like 'good exercise'.

× Yes, it is very popular in our country because uh, to travel from one destination to another.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in our country because people use them to travel from one place to another.

Number agreement and sentence completeness: 'it is very popular' is vague—'bicycles' should be plural. The clause 'because uh, to travel...' is incomplete; include a subject and verb: 'people use them to travel'. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use plural subject for 'bicycles' and a complete clause 'people use them to...'.

× People do use to commute transport mode of transport the bike because in case of the public transport not available due to some strike or some sort of circumstances, so they happen to use the BIC bikes.

✓ People often use bikes as a mode of transport, especially when public transport is unavailable due to strikes or other circumstances.

Multiple issues: 'do use to commute' wrongly combines 'do use' and 'used to'. Use 'often use' or 'use' for habitual action. 'Mode of transport the bike' is ungrammatical—reorder to 'use bikes as a mode of transport'. The conditional 'in case of the public transport not available' should be 'when public transport is unavailable'. 'so they happen to use the BIC bikes' is wordy and unclear; simplify to 'especially when public transport is unavailable'. Suggestion: Use 'use' or 'often use', reorder phrase to 'use bikes as a mode of transport', and use 'when public transport is unavailable due to strikes or other circumstances'.