Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., “He and we, my family”) and keep within 3–5 sentences. Mention when, where or a memorable detail to make the answer more vivid.

예시: Yes, I did. I loved riding my bike with my father when I was a child, and we often cycled together on weekends to a nearby park. Those rides were special because we would stop for ice cream and talk about our week.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Replace vague phrases like “everybody can afford it” with more precise comments about cost or availability. Limit to 3–4 sentences and include one concrete example or statistic if possible.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, most children learn from their parents, and many cities have convenient public bike rental systems, so people can rent a bike cheaply for short trips. As a result, cycling is a common and affordable mode of transport for commuting and leisure.

× Yes, I had a bike and I love to ride a bike with my father.

✓ Yes, I had a bike and I loved to ride it with my father.

The sentence mixes past tense ('had') with present simple ('love'). Both actions refer to childhood, so past tense should be used for consistency. Also use the pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same time frame; change 'love' to 'loved' and replace the second 'a bike' with 'it' to sound natural.

× He and we, my family, spent a time together riding bike on weekends.

✓ He and we, my family, spent time together riding bikes on weekends.

The phrase 'spent a time' is unnatural; use 'spent time' without 'a'. 'Riding bike' needs plural or article: 'riding bikes' or 'riding a bike'. Since multiple people rode, 'riding bikes' is appropriate. Also 'He and we, my family' is awkward but acceptable; consider 'He and the rest of my family' for clarity.

× Yes, very popular.

✓ Yes, they are very popular.

Answer lacks a subject and verb; 'Yes, very popular' is a fragment. Provide a full sentence matching the question about 'bikes': use 'they are' and maintain plural 'popular'. This ensures grammatical completeness.

× Normally kids learn how to ride a bike when they are young from their parents, and you can easily find the rental shops in Korea and also rental bikes on the streets, so everybody can afford it.

✓ Normally, kids learn how to ride a bike from their parents when they are young, and you can easily find rental shops and rental bikes on the streets in Korea, so everybody can afford them.

The original sentence has awkward word order and preposition placement. 'Learn how to ride a bike when they are young from their parents' is better as 'learn...from their parents when they are young' for natural flow. 'Rental shops in Korea and also rental bikes on the streets' repeats 'rental' and splits location awkwardly; combine phrases and place 'in Korea' appropriately. Finally, 'everybody can afford it' is incorrect because 'it' is ambiguous; use 'them' to refer to 'rental shops and bikes' or better 'rental bikes'. Also add commas for clarity.